You generously gave me
words on a page simple words
dancing on the lunatic fringe
Adverbs lustily following
action verbs
Adjectives pushing
nouns deeply into the abyss
of pronouns names without a face-
yet totally recognizable
Your ink on the page
behaving so much like
small pulsing jolts
of blue lightning
serving to modify parts of me
that for the first time
were miraculously
not misplaced
Others have given me
candles, wine and song
but you, you gave me
words on a page
the most generous gift of all
three very distinct flavors in this delicious write... oooooooh yes!!!! the obvious "grammer" layer which is creatively clever and brilliant... Then the heated use of those cleverly used "tools" on the page, then the last layer is the message of sweet words written for others to enjoy.... this has to be one of my all time favorite pieces I have read on here so far..... by a mile... it has thought-provoking personification and metaphors, it has sensual, seductive, teasing heat, and it has sweet romance and deep meaning... well-rounded STUNNING write... I am in awe!!
Posted 10 Years Ago
2 of 2 people found this review constructive.
10 Years Ago
April, you will leave me blushing soon. thank you so much. Lydi**
10 Years Ago
well, now.. just giving my opinion.... anytime ma'am... :)
The generosity of your gift overwhelms me. When words of yours find my eyes I am wrapped in a tender loving care.
Regards,
Al
Posted 8 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
8 Years Ago
Al, what a lovely thing to say. I wrote this in 2014 so the fact you found it and reviewed it means.. read moreAl, what a lovely thing to say. I wrote this in 2014 so the fact you found it and reviewed it means so much. Thank you. Lydi**
I'm not an avid fan of the show "The Bachelor" or "The Bachelorette," but I did happen to watch the episode years ago with Trista and Ryan, wherein he wrote her a poem. At that very moment, I thought he was THE one; and as it turns out, he was. They are the only couple that have remained together, have been together for years, and they have two children. Perhaps being a woman and poet makes me feel the same, but I think a poem is one of the greatest, most heartfelt gifts that you can ever receive. Your poem embodies this so well. Great work!
Posted 10 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
10 Years Ago
What a lovely review, Linda. Thank you. I have never watched either of those shows, but you are ri.. read moreWhat a lovely review, Linda. Thank you. I have never watched either of those shows, but you are right....giving someone a poem is the ultimate gift. Lydi**
"Words on a page, the most generous gift of all". Your work brings a smile to my day, it would be great to sit and listen to your take on life.
Posted 10 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
10 Years Ago
That would take many hours...days even! :) Thank you so much for your review. Lydi**
10 Years Ago
:) since settling in rural South Australia, after roaming for a while, I met many people and sat a l.. read more:) since settling in rural South Australia, after roaming for a while, I met many people and sat a listened to their colourful history. Life is just so amazing
I so love words Lydia, for as long as I can remember I have tried to learn a new one each day. and what better gift than that of words...Clever, softly sensual and beautifully written poem..Bravo to you...Dee
Posted 10 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
10 Years Ago
Dee, yes, I love them too. Thank you so much. Lydi**
Beautiful, beautiful poem! I love its integrity and absolutely love your choice of words - they really do send "small pulsing jolts" up my spine! This has now become one of my favourite poems.
I read this and enjoyed the words, then I re-read it and think I detected a hidden message. It seemed as though it was an anticipated review of any poem that you are reading on this site. If I am wrong, I apologise - if I'm correct I compliment you on a skilful subliminal message., as well as a beautiful poem.
Norman
Posted 10 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
10 Years Ago
It's a little of both, Norman. Words....I have been in love with them since I was a little girl. I.. read moreIt's a little of both, Norman. Words....I have been in love with them since I was a little girl. I so enjoy reading good poetry and writing it. Thank you for your review. Lydi**