not alone

i’ve colored outside the lines of life

till the borders of my composure

are ambiguous at best

no amount of white-out can correct

the now squiggly lines

yes, the even span of years past has been navigated

(a carelessly tossed cigarette burned what was left of it)

reverberating with the echoes of life

my composure is not too steady

hey, it's time to accept it 

i’m just a victim of time and gravity

and i'm certainly not alone

 

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

In the echoes of life you are not alone for you reveberate in the hearts and minds of your family, friends and fans. You have lived to the fullest outside the lines of borders and boxes and have no regrets when the last cigarrette was burnt. You are not alone for your legacy echoes. Excellent...:).............

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you so much, Sami! Lydi**

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure. Any time...:)...................

[AprilRN1210]

I, for one, enjoy coloring outside of the lines.. just because we are different doesn't mean we are alone.. may feel like it sometimes.. looking back at the life we have painted can be such a reality check, but needed at times.. difference is, rejecting the victim mentality and embracing ownership and looking forward to the future, learning from those memories.. this one is so deep.. it makes the reader take away our own meaning after performing our own self-reflection.. that takes skill and talent, of which you have an abundance.. another amazing write my friend.. "reverberating with the echoes of life".. love this line..

[Lydia Shutter]

Sweet April, thank you for beginning my day with such a lovely review. The fact is, we are all human and because of that, we all have similar problems and thoughts. Glad you could identify with this in some way. Take care. Lydi**

[AprilRN1210]

it is always a pleasure m'am.. and couldn't agree more.. :)

[Shaquana Adams]

i’ve colored outside the lines of life
till the borders of my composure
are ambiguous at best

I love these very powerful lines. Nicely said Lydi :)
-QuanaWana

[Lydia Shutter]

I always appreciate your reviews. Thank you very much. Lydi**

[Coyote Poetry]

"i’m just a victim of time and gravity
and i'm certainly not alone"
I do understand this poem. Above lines are true for me also. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Lydia Shutter]

We are all in this together, n'est pas? :) Thank you so much for the review. Lydi**

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome. Always a pleasure to read your words.

[Sheila Kline]

Your words ring with truth as we are all "victim" of that which comes upon us like a creeping vine. We are tossed to and fro upon the seas of life and realize no matter what we do we cannot stop that which is certain to come. As you indicate in the final lines, we are a victim and we are not alone. But, oh how we wish at times that we could go back to the "before times" and live it all over again - perhaps with a different twist, but just to have the opportunity to do so with that coloring crayon of experience!
Excellent thoughts and observations!!!

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you Sheila....not sure I would want to relive some of what I have been through even with the entire box of crayons! :) I always appreciate your reviews. Lydi**

[Diana]

A beautiful piece. It is hard to discern what we are and what we're not, as time and circumstance continually take their toll. However, you said it much more beautifully than me. I imagine a projection screen going in and out of focus, trying to project an even portrait of a lady...

[Lydia Shutter]

Diana, what a nice surprise to see a review from you. Thank you so much. Lydi**

[emmajoy]

Methinks we all feel similar emotions, Lydi, but, sadly can't express them as clearly and gently as you. There are times when day-to-day life becomes too much; we seem to be searching for buttons in a thick fog, fingers useless in the swirl of it. But even so, we're not alone - there are others creeping around, hunts pumping away, hope still intact but briefly hidden. Tis a strange sensation, not specially enjoyable but after all, we're only human. Your writing always makes me think further.. thank you

[Neville]

Hey You,
You are certainly not alone & judging by your reviews to date, you never will be. Remember this when all seems dark. ---- There is a crack in everything
That's how the light gets in... L.C most definitely not me... AGT's Neville

[Lydia Shutter]

Thanks so much, Neville. I appreciate your review. Lydi**

[Ken Simm.]

No indeed we are victims of that Lyndi. don't forget its also called experience which is a very precious thing. This write ranges into itself which again is anther precious and rare thing these days.

[Lydia Shutter]

Thanks so much, Ken. I appreciate your review. I will be back to writing again soon. Lydi**

[Stephen]

i’m just a victim of time and gravity
and i'm certainly not alone

~~ I loved these lines, these lines are so powerful ~~ It`s an excellent job here you do. Glad to read your work again.

[Lydia Shutter]

Thanks, Stephen. I have not posted anything in about 7 weeks...just too busy. I appreciate you stopping by. Lydi**

[Stephen]

My pleasure~ Oh I see .. Umm, Don`t worry, i`ll read your some earlier stuffs and get your some reviews ;) Hope to read your new stuffs soon!

[Madison O'Dwyer]

Another beautiful one! I was gripped from start to finish! Eloquent, philosophical and stunning. Thanks for sharing :)

[Lydia Shutter]

Thanks, Madison. Lydi**