i will dance

we have to choose to be happy some days

the blue lady” by monique edwards

courtesy of paintoutsidethelines of etsy.com

the day stirs me
asking me who i want to be
the girl infatuated with hope
     or the woman whose dreams
          have faded over time
headlines weep this morning
but i am thirsty for good news
                and a strong cup of coffee
my mind migrates
to a cocoon of recollection
where the sun was always shining

and the silence between stars smiled down on me
this is who i will always be
so when the night comes to call
i will dance to its happy song

Author's Note

dealing with some "stuff" and forcing myself to see the sunshine

Reviews

[R.M.C]

A lovely and striking piece Lydi. The mention of the two completely opposite versions of who you could be highlight really well the different versions of oneself and the conscious decisions of which aspect of yourself will be brought to the front - reflecting reality and the mind in a very simple but easy to understand way. Though the whole piece is great, there are two more key point I would personally say stands out (along with the point I've already made): "headlines weep this morning" is a simple line but says a lot, making subtle mention to the media and how they can make things depressing and put a sad and pitiful spin on the world - I'me very glad you added this as it fits in exceedingly well with the overall topic; and "my mind migrates to a cocoon of recollection" is another key aspect - especially with the lines following - as it broaches the ideas behind human nature, how we automatically think and dream of better times, where "the sun was always shining". A really great piece. I hope I've made my thoughts clear and that it expresses how good your poem is.

[Lydia Shutter]

My goodness, this is one of the best reviews I have ever received and the fact it is on a poem I wrote over two years ago makes me so very happy. Thank you very much. Lydi**

[R.M.C]

You're welcome.

[TL Boehm]

forcing oneself to see the sunshine is the harder but better choice. "stuff" can and will eat you alive if you let it. "Thirsty for good news and strong coffee." Like that much.

[Lydia Shutter]

Thanks so much, Tammy. Have a great weekend. Lydi**

[The Girl Who Loved Too ..]

Just....beautiful. Thank you for this.

[Lydia Shutter]

And thank you for this review. Lydi**

[redzone]

Hi Lydi, well I have an extra shovel and between us, we can bury all that "stuff", wash our hands of it and then, Ms Lydi, can I have this dance? We can dance until those stars not only smile down, but shout and join in the dancing... we can dance until they become supernovas of happiness!!! And when you are exhausted from all that dancing, I have made some coffee... (besides, Im getting married tomorrow and you are the Matron of Honor!!! You know Frieda will demand happiness. LOL) enjoyed this line: "a girl infatuated with hope", I know that is you Lydi... "nice" poem ~~redzone

[Lydia Shutter]

I actually laughed out loud when I read this review, Curt. Not sure how much dancing you and I can do...after all, Frieda is the jealous type and those stars might have arrows pointed at me if she finds out! Of course there will be happiness at the bowling alley...and later at the No Tell Motel! Curt, thank you so much for this "nice" review. Your sense of humor is always tickling me. lydi**

[s y e]

Sometimes when we're down we need to try and find that light again. We need think about the happy times. I hope the cloud passes by you soon!

Girl, this is amazeballs! It's a flip flops from me & all that jazz (as Frieda and I say)

[Lydia Shutter]

Love it! thank you so much. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

a strong cup of coffee and even stronger will to overcome...

god, you are good...your words just jump off the page and slap me in the face...a good slap.

[Lydia Shutter]

Next you will be saying, "thanks, I needed that!" :) I appreciate your review so much, Jacob. Thanks. Lydi*

[jacob erin-cilberto]

what was that slogan's product? "electric shave or afta shave?

[Lydia Shutter]

I think it was Mennen....skin bracer maybe? My father used to use it...now THERE's a memory! LOL

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, i think that might be it!!!!!!!!! skin bracer....thanks, i did need that...:)

[Lydia Shutter]

LOL anytime, Jacob.

[Sheila Kline]

Oh yes!! There are times when it takes an extra amount of effort to find the sunshine and allow it to heal us but it is so worth the effort!! Your words indeed hold so much hope and a willingness to keep searching and be bathed in the healing power of "revival" and "survival"!
I love the write with your message of carrying on though it is so dang difficult at times!! The artwork is also exquisite - as always!!

[Lydia Shutter]

Sheila, I am so happy you were the first reviewer because you really get to the heart of my words. Thank you so much. Lydi**