i will dance

we have to choose to be happy some days

the blue lady” by monique edwards

courtesy of paintoutsidethelines of etsy.com

the day stirs me
asking me who i want to be
the girl infatuated with hope
     or the woman whose dreams
          have faded over time
headlines weep this morning
but i am thirsty for good news
                and a strong cup of coffee
my mind migrates
to a cocoon of recollection
where the sun was always shining

and the silence between stars smiled down on me
this is who i will always be
so when the night comes to call
i will dance to its happy song

Author's Note

dealing with some "stuff" and forcing myself to see the sunshine

Reviews

[R.M.C]

A lovely and striking piece Lydi. The mention of the two completely opposite versions of who you could be highlight really well the different versions of oneself and the conscious decisions of which aspect of yourself will be brought to the front - reflecting reality and the mind in a very simple but easy to understand way. Though the whole piece is great, there are two more key point I would personally say stands out (along with the point I've already made): "headlines weep this morning" is a simple line but says a lot, making subtle mention to the media and how they can make things depressing and put a sad and pitiful spin on the world - I'me very glad you added this as it fits in exceedingly well with the overall topic; and "my mind migrates to a cocoon of recollection" is another key aspect - especially with the lines following - as it broaches the ideas behind human nature, how we automatically think and dream of better times, where "the sun was always shining". A really great piece. I hope I've made my thoughts clear and that it expresses how good your poem is.

[Lydia Shutter]

My goodness, this is one of the best reviews I have ever received and the fact it is on a poem I wrote over two years ago makes me so very happy. Thank you very much. Lydi**

[R.M.C]

You're welcome.

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. Soooo beautiful and touching. I'm just basking in its dancing beauty...Bravo.......................

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you, Sami. Lydi**

[Sami Khalil]

My plasure...Any time...:)........................

[A. Amos]

A good perspective about your inner thoughts and you crafted brillianly. Many will conmect with your deep and meaningful thought...

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you so much. Lydi**

[A. Amos]

You're welcome my friend

[Sanober]

It's so true when they say...we are the architects of our own happiness. You take that perspective and make it dance and sparkle and comfort. Who wouldn't want to be the girl 'infatuated with hope'. Though its not always easy to 'see the sunshine' ...sometimes it's all we have to hold on to. Just wonderful, Lydi.

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you so much, Sanober....you are so kind to me. Lydi***

[Diana]

"so when the night comes to call
i will dance to its happy song"- I get the sense of struggling with something and "going home," to a calmer place deep within. I still get the sense of trying to see the positive. A strong woman and writer.

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you, Diana. The weeks leading up to my aunt's death were very difficult on me. I am her only surviving relative. She was like a second Mom to me...so a few of my poems involved the emotions I was experiencing. I appreciate your review. Lydi**

[Listmaker]

There are dancers through life and there are victims of life. You are a dancer and I know from experience that that isn't always easy. Many years of living have taught me to dance more.

[Lydia Shutter]

Dancing is the thing to do....there is too much time for sadness. Thank you very much. Lydi**

[NeiL ArandA]

Oh my gosh ! If I would sing and audition this piece at the American Idol talent show . I would drop Simon's Cowell jaw when I sing this piece . It has everything in it . You have perfected free verse . I like the choice you decided to make here . Though life is full of challenges You choose the brighter side of it and look and take the not so good side with adifferent perspective . I'm impress with the wisdom of your piece . I have a lesson in life to take with me .

[Lydia Shutter]

Neil, you truly made me smile with this wonderful review. Again, I thank you. Lydi**

[Saddam]

love this too much. A such art of love which allows you to dance till you want. I love this.

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you very much. Lydi**

[Saddam]

thanks and you are welcome.

[wordman]

well lydi I hope you danced the poem the imagery was great as usual

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you, Ron. Lydi***

[Rita L. Sev]

headlines weep this morning
but i am thirsty for good news...

Some days it really is so hard to find the joy... but the thirst for it is wise, and always leads to what you seek... I enjoyed this poem, Lydi - a reminder to dance...

[Lydia Shutter]

Thanks so much, Rita. Lydi**

[Ruth]

This really is a hard hitting poem Lydi...I do hope you are ok and the "stuff" eases...you deserve shimmers and smiles, your writing is a blessing to read x

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you, Poppy. Lydi**