I thank you

artwork by Vidan

courtesy of blogspot.com

When dusk whittles the day
down to mere shadows
you crawl into the bottomless pockets
of my fantasies
inflaming the edges of craving
awakening sleepy longing
you measure my meaning
not with syllables
but with sensations
          oui, mon amour
with the lyrical elegance of a kiss
you help me tattoo the naked page
and I thank you

 

Reviews

[Robert Tusitala O'Neill]

I love the idea of bottomless pockets of fantasy!! Tattoo the naked page! There is so much to be said about the lovely flow of this poem. I am especially satisfied with the unity of the theme. All too often I find poems stray from the main topic. This one remains intimately, intensely focused on its object of affection, and I believe that is the best one can do in writing!

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you very much, Robby! Lydi**

[Coll Silvermoon]

I agree Robby. I couldn't agree more.

[Lydia Shutter]

Thanks, Coll!

[Desert Knave]

"with the lyrical elegance of a kiss / you help me tattoo the naked page". Whew. I think those are exactly the kind of lines my mother warned me against reading. Smoldering stuff. Well done. ~Jim

[Lydia Shutter]

Giggling here...Jim, you are good for what ails me. So frustrated with the site losing everything earlier today and my friend list is obliterated. Thanks for stopping by. Hope all is well with you. Lydi**

[Josh Dollar]

Beautiful, just beautiful!

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you, Josh. Lydi**

[Jack...]

Lydi, this is so very wonderful and gorgeous. It is as if i can hear you sighing as you speak these words in your mind. Your pen always flows in such exquisite ink and I know your words will always be permanent in my heart. Very smooth, soft and subtle.

[Lydia Shutter]

Jack, you say the nicest things in your reviews. Thank you so much. lydi**

[Liz Alexander]

Short but sweet the heart lingers for more but so perfecting ending. Thank you for the sweet remembrance of a moment in time. In love,
Liz

[Lydia Shutter]

Thanks so much. Lydi**

[Frieda P]

Ah Lydi this vibrates on your page, like a tattoo artist's iron would, there's a quiet magic in your words, just always takes me away in my mind to another place and time.........stunning my friend.

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you very much, Frieda. Lydi**

[SUGATA M]

I love these two expressions particularly:
'you measure my meaning
not with syllables
but with sensations'

'you help me tattoo the naked page'

Keep going man.

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you for your review. Lydi**

[Sami Khalil]

Your pages are tattoed with beautiful lyrics and your heart is tattoed with flowing passions. Your meanings are measured in cascading sensations...A wonderful poem...:).................

[Lydia Shutter]

What a lovely thing to say, Sami. Thank you. Lydi**

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)....................