the moon cries

the moon cries

A Poem by Lydia Shutter
"

memories envelop me at times..how i miss them

"


artwork by Steve Zazenski of allthatart on etsy.com 






the immense quiet of morning

is interrupted only by the house creaking

through the white space of

not quite asleep

not quite awake

snippets of memory

from what seems like another lifetime

begin to play

such daredevils they are

balancing on the tightrope of emotion

my mind jumps from one place to another

the newspaper is delivered

the unmowed grass is high

what’s for dinner?

tease-taunt

he started it-no she did

tag you’re it               

watch me run faster than the butterflies

my sandcastle is taller than yours

soon the whole day has vanished

eaten by those memories

and in the immense quiet of a starry night

the moon cries

© 2013 Lydia Shutter


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What an incredible piece of writing, Lydi....the whole poem flashed past me like those snapshots of memories...evoking an achingly beautiful, bittersweet wistfulness. it is often in the 'immense quiet' of mornings and starry nights that we find ourselves soaked in fond memories...and you capture the inexpressible like a dream, my friend. just loved this one.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lydia Shutter

11 Years Ago

Hello Sanober! Thank you so much for the review. Hope all is well with you. Lydi**



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what a delightfully taunting, haunting read. very relatable and filled with emotion. fast paced much like the day rushing past you when lost to broken memories

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lydia Shutter

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much for your review. Lydi**
Great read, the layout really gave the poem an extra demention that made it especially powerful. Thanks for sharing.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lydia Shutter

11 Years Ago

Thank you very much for your review. Lydi**
Very eloquent imagery, that's evocative of the longing of bygone innocence, you depicted into this
Write, Lydi. Being a Floridan, the last six lines are my favorite, since
It brought me back to my own childhood, this is simply beautiful! Thanks for sharing :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lydia Shutter

11 Years Ago

Barrie, I am a Floridian too....since the age of 16 anyway. Near Fort Lauderdale here....you? Than.. read more
ms. barrie

11 Years Ago

:) I used to live in Hollywood lol , now I'm in Lady Lake & loving it!
You're very welcome, L.. read more
Yes I have this in my life. Thank you for expressing it so well. You are wonderful what a heart you have.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lydia Shutter

11 Years Ago

I am humbled by your words, Tom. thank you. Lydi**
How we long for our childhood with it's innocence and lack of serious responsibility and how we mourn the passing of the days as we approach the shortening of the days and the lengthening of shadows.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lydia Shutter

11 Years Ago

I think you are right, John...the older we are, the more we long for those carefree days. Thank you.. read more
Ahhh!! Enjoyed reading this memory or memories.Great work expressing the thoughts and ideas..I also remember the days of children's laughter..Sara

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lydia Shutter

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much, Sara. Lydi**
Sunflower/Sara Kendrick

11 Years Ago

You are quite welcome..Sara
Children grow up all to quickly and move on to have their own lives but those indelible memories, precious moments and impressions they made when the family were all together are etched deep in the psyche for ever!

A poignant reminisce of harmonious days now past!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lydia Shutter

11 Years Ago

Thank you very much, Tom. Lydi**
powerful. the jumping of scenes really plays with my mind, i love it. Makes me feel like im flitting through your memories. And I find the ending, the moon cries, really overwhelming. It feels to me like you have lost somebody/people dear to you. Thank you for sharing your precious memories in such a beautiful way.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lydia Shutter

11 Years Ago

Thank you very much, Brooke....yes, this was about my cousin who was like a brother to me and my mom.. read more
Brooke Graco

11 Years Ago

I am sorry for your loss, and I'm sure that your cousin would be proud to be remembered in such a be.. read more
Lydia Shutter

11 Years Ago

thank you!
oh...yeah. this is stellar, both figuratively and physically. the jumpiness of your images bleed together in such a way that, like William mentioned, it feels like the scene unfolds much like it does when we try to conjure memories and hold onto them. great images, the form is EVERYTHING here. one suggestion (this is personal opinion, not based on anything intelligent) that I have is switching the spacing of the fourth and fifth lines, or even adding empty space in between a couple of the individual words; I feel like this would augment the sensation described (in limbo between dreams and reality) in a way that would impact a little stronger than it currently does, which is already incredibly strong. Love this poem, adding to my favorites. well penned, and thank you so much for sharing!!!


Posted 11 Years Ago


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Lydia Shutter

11 Years Ago

Thank you for your in depth review. I appreciate it. Lydi**

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