Jiggled and Jostled

Sometimes it's just not enough

Artwork by Richard Johnson “Evening Comes”

 

 

 

 

Love jiggled and jostled
through the humid salt air
the mercury continued to rise
till it seemed even the ice
in my Beefeater’s and tonic
would ignite


Tossed and tumbled emotions
rode the waves
while your magical fingers
strummed your guitar
voluptuous music
on a heretofore wordless journey

My words floated on your chords
like golden stars in an ebon sky
inspired by humid salt air
love jiggled and jostled
but never quite found its home

 

 

Reviews

[MsJewel]

I could hear the music, feel your words...so sad the two never quite found there home, but perhaps some relationships are just not meant to be. Love your description - jiggled and jostled...and the Richard Johnson painting is one of my favorites. The perfect painting to accompany your lovely words.

This week has been so busy for me...I'm so glad I can take a few minutes and catch up on your poetry. :) Julie

[Lydia Shutter]

I appreciate the time you took to read me and leave such a lovely review, Julie. Don't work too hard. Lydi**

[lee von cleef]

Jiggled and jostled ...
But oh it made great buttermilk !
And the music beat a tune like a spoon in pancake batter
Sometime you have to wait till morning light
Long past the the jigger and Beefeater courage
To wake to another singing in the kitchen
little bubbles in the wine,
little bubbles show when to flip a pancake too
if the skillets not too hot.

[Lydia Shutter]

Quite the interesting review....with metaphor all its own. Thanks. Lydi**

[Sanober]

Sounds like the ideally romantic, torrid, dreamy love affair... sometimes things that perfect are just never meant to last. I could almost hear the strum of that guitar and smell that humid air. It all unfolded before me like a romantic feel good music video. Love that artwork too...it's just meant for this poem.

[Lydia Shutter]

Sanober, it was true....way back when. He wrote the music, I wrote the lyrics, but it was not meant to be. thank you so much. Lydi**

[OTownPete]

Aha, I always had you pegged for a Gin drinker Lydi, with or without a twist? As usual your words I applaud. Your friend in words, Pete

[Lydia Shutter]

Haven't had a drink in over 10 years, but it was Beefeater's, tonic, and a twist of lime....you know it. Thanks for the review, Pete. lydi**

[Tom]

Commitment is the key to love is the message here and that's why this relationship was tempestuous and doubtless became stranded on rocky shores!

A sensuous write to savor !

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you so much, Tom. Lydi**

[Aethereal]

Excellent free verse isn't easy to write, but it seems to me that you have mastered this art form. I love the order, flow, cadence, imagery, and vernacular of this poem. You developed your enduring theme from beginning to end leaving nothing out. This girl was attracted to this guitarist’s alluring music as iron is attracted to a far off magnet whereby the magnet isn’t strong enough to pull the iron into it. Would that I could write a metered rhyming poem on this theme with as much creativity. I’ll keep this poem in the back of my mind from now on for some future attempt on the same theme, but in my usual style.

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you for this lovely review. I used to write a lot of rhyming poetry, but I feel free verse has much more opportunity to express emotion. I really appreciate your words. Lydi**

[Aethereal]

You're welcome! I'll let you know when I've written a rhyming poem on this same theme. It won't be easy doing as well as you have with free verse, but I'll try.

[Lydia Shutter]

Great, I look forward to it.

[Everett DeValle]

Extraordinary, Lydi...it's never enough, it always takes work lol, lovely lament, Madame Lydi. :)

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you so much, Ev. Have a great day. Lydi**

[Everett DeValle]

You are very welcome, Madame Lydi. :)

[redflutterby]

Some attractions just never quite get there! Beautiful poem and the picture is just breathtaking! ;-)

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you so much. Lydi**

[TL Boehm]

This poem reminded me of the one time I actually thought I'd chase down a guitarist and make him mine....and when I had his attention "meh" sigh.
Its a lovely poem with an inescapable dose of reality.

[Lydia Shutter]

Yup, this one was real way back when.....long ago and far away for sure. Thanks, Tammy....guitar players are not easy to deal with. They are artists just as we are! :)

[Seashell]

Oh that darned jiggling and jostling plays havoc with us girlies .. This was so beautiful to read .. I had thee most perfect vision whilst reading it. I hope Love found it's home in the end though !
Thanks for sweet, clever share
:-)

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you so much for the review. Lydi**