i chase a
run on sentence
around the corner of a concept
straight into the arms of a vacuum
(and we all know nature abhors
a vacuum) nonsensical yet ample
particles of cosmic “schmutz”
swarm my head
sucking out self ridicule
a tasty treat savored
by only the true connoisseur
so push the pedals of propriety get
back jack!
pull the trigger on your mirth
a new day is dawning
gonna enjoy it
for all i’m worth
Nicely done. I love the euphemisms that you have here and how it is like a turning point in the road for you, I actually had to read it twice because the first part of the poem gave me the vision of someone being with some type of gypsy or other type of Divination practitioner and you were there to hear about your future. The second part sounded like a response to what the person said. As I read the poem again I still in visioned the same thing.... I think this teaches me to wake up before reading. However, I really enjoyed the poem and thank you for sharing.
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
Once the words are out there, the reader brings his or her own experience to the poem, Nickie. As l.. read moreOnce the words are out there, the reader brings his or her own experience to the poem, Nickie. As long as you got SOME meaning out of it, it is a valid one. Thank you so much for your review. Lydi**
words perfectly placed upon the page, and words so bloomin relateable to too ... just so damned good... would I be here if you were not worth it.... no of course not.. but ya are aint ya.....
Posted 5 Years Ago
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5 Years Ago
Always smile when I read your reviews, Neville. Thank you once again for going back in time...it me.. read moreAlways smile when I read your reviews, Neville. Thank you once again for going back in time...it means a lot to me! Lydi**
"pull the trigger on your mirth
a new day is dawning
gonna enjoy it
for all i’m worth"
Thank you for the fun and positive poem. I had to read twice. A outstanding poem to read this early morning.
Coyote
Nicely done. I love the euphemisms that you have here and how it is like a turning point in the road for you, I actually had to read it twice because the first part of the poem gave me the vision of someone being with some type of gypsy or other type of Divination practitioner and you were there to hear about your future. The second part sounded like a response to what the person said. As I read the poem again I still in visioned the same thing.... I think this teaches me to wake up before reading. However, I really enjoyed the poem and thank you for sharing.
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
Once the words are out there, the reader brings his or her own experience to the poem, Nickie. As l.. read moreOnce the words are out there, the reader brings his or her own experience to the poem, Nickie. As long as you got SOME meaning out of it, it is a valid one. Thank you so much for your review. Lydi**
100 out of 100. I need to go enjoy something. Too bad I have to work. Did enjoy this. Trace
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
WOW, Trace, you really do spoil me when you have the time to read my poetry. Thank you once again. .. read moreWOW, Trace, you really do spoil me when you have the time to read my poetry. Thank you once again. Lydi**
I always Love to unwind by reading poetry...whether I leave reviews of not...masterfully crafted, Madame Lydi...it is like my favorite artist Salvador Dali...surreally beautiful. :)
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11 Years Ago
It does look like Dali's work, absolutely. Thanks so much, Ev. Lydi**
11 Years Ago
Maybe, similar to Dali's work...but it's all you, Lydi, and all of your essence. ;)
You.. read moreMaybe, similar to Dali's work...but it's all you, Lydi, and all of your essence. ;)
You are very welcome, Madame Lydi...magnifique. Sacre bleu lol ;)
How you put words together and use your mind to play games is always my treat in reading you, short and sharp in generous amount. Each day is a new beginning and I do hope you enjoy each rising with another write... Write...Write!
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Nothing could stop me, Ron! :) Thank you very much for your review. Lydi**
'i chase a run on sentence/around the corner of a concept' i really just love those two lines! not to say the rest of it wasn't great, of course. i adore your voice, it's really unique. (:
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Thank you so much, Heather. When I saw your name, I was transported back to high school. I had a c.. read moreThank you so much, Heather. When I saw your name, I was transported back to high school. I had a classmate with your last name. He was from England. Good memories. Lydi**
Lydi, you words run crazy around the inner walls of my mind. I love how this comes across, fun whimsical, a bit chaotic and filled with smiles and a happy ending.. One part though...oh well, Jack is a common name. :)
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Smiling here....sorry I used your name in vain! :) Just an expression...but you knew that. Thanks.. read moreSmiling here....sorry I used your name in vain! :) Just an expression...but you knew that. Thanks for the review. Have a great day. Lydi**