eventually

photo courtesy of virtual-meditation.com

 

 

 

 

 

like a candle’s wick smoking as it burns out
the unfamiliar eventually will be familiar
the eloquent erodes into gibberish
                                 tick tock
                        tick tock
and with flaccid indifference
we are all                            

lost
in the translation

Reviews

[David Scott]

Oh I loved the philosophy here lydi! Wonderful. You speak a great truth for those who would head the wise perspective.
The format was a distraction. Your poetry was very strong and needed no "devise" to get the point across.
I honestly would change the deminishing font...
Otherwise, loved, loved and loved this poem.

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you, David. I appreciate your thoughts. I do enjoy playing with font size and indentation in my poetry. Perhaps it is distracting, but I have to please me sometimes too! :) Lydi**

[Joyce S. Greene]

Like you've always said, Lydi, when you post a poem you are giving over its meaning to its readers. Their perspectives will color every word you've written until it is unrecognizable to the poet. None of us will live forever and we can only hope that what remains of our intentions when we wrote it, have, at least to some extent, survived that translation. Your graphic and poem are striking. I was caught up in the flame of each.

[Lydia Shutter]

I am smiling at the various interpretations of this poem. They all are valid, no doubt. I like yours! Thank you so much, Joyce. The last line of your comment could spark a poem! Oh, IO like your new icon! Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i think for poetry ...translation is more in the eye of the beholder...but...often the poet wonders "where did my meaning go in all of this?"

:)


spicy good short poem.

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you for your comments, Jacob. Lydi**

[Sanober]

Oh yes! "the unfamiliar eventually will be familiar
the eloquent erodes into gibberish "....this explains life with such depth and wisdom, Lydi.
Life's so much more than just running the rat race. Thank you so much for reposting this, my friend.

[Lydia Shutter]

I'm thrilled you asked for it, Sanober! Thank you for commenting again. Be well. Lydi**

[icelandicblue]

We never know how long our candle will burn but we can't lose all that makes life exciting and worth living by accepting the mundane. We miss the whole point of living when we do. Nicely done.

[Lydia Shutter]

The mundane is NOT acceptable....how right you are. Thank you very much. Lydi**

[Anand Sehgal]

Yes , as I believe, ephemerality is the truest form of reality. deep write :)

[Lydia Shutter]

You know it, Anand. We never know what Madame Fate has in store for us. Carpe Diem! Thank you for the comments. Lydi**

[Anand Sehgal]

Destiny leads and we follow. :)

[William J. Marsh]

So much deep meaning in so few words, beautiful!

[Lydia Shutter]

Thanks very much. Lydi**

[Desert Knave]

Wow. A little darker fare then your normal and quite well said. None of us are immune to to the wick burning out. ~Jim

[Lydia Shutter]

We all have emotional ups and downs, Jim....even me! :) Thanks for the comments. Hope all is well in your world. Lydi**

[Frieda P]

Makes you wonder how much really does get lost in translation....the minutes tick away and with it the chance to catch the vibrancy of life...well said my friend!

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you, Frieda. Lydi**

[Tom]

Life is indeed short and fragile, so better not to get caught up in it's many varying eccentricities! Instead, grab it by both handles and enjoy it ! Time waits for no man ! ( or woman )!!

A poem short in length yet rich in detail and eloquent in it's portrayal !!

[Lydia Shutter]

Tom, the fact you truly "read" my words means a lot to me. Thank you very much. Lydi**

[Tom]

Is there any other way Rita ?

[Lydia Shutter]

Rita? Okay then, I will answer to that name too! :) What I meant was, often people do not read into what a poet is saying. You do...and I appreciate that. Take care. Lydi*

[Tom]

Apologies Lydia, I got your name crossed with another poetess on W.C. Yes I see what you mean, there's not much point reviewing a poem if you're not going to analyse it's content I'm sure you would agree ?

[Lydia Shutter]

Absolutely, Tom.

[Hana Saemon]

i love that line "lost in the translation". that's life isnt it? good write!

[Lydia Shutter]

It surely is, Hana. Thank you so much. Lydi**