like a candle’s wick smoking as it burns out the unfamiliar
eventually will be familiar the eloquent erodes into gibberish tick tock
tick tock and with flaccid indifference we are all
Oh I loved the philosophy here lydi! Wonderful. You speak a great truth for those who would head the wise perspective.
The format was a distraction. Your poetry was very strong and needed no "devise" to get the point across.
I honestly would change the deminishing font...
Otherwise, loved, loved and loved this poem.
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Thank you, David. I appreciate your thoughts. I do enjoy playing with font size and indentation in.. read moreThank you, David. I appreciate your thoughts. I do enjoy playing with font size and indentation in my poetry. Perhaps it is distracting, but I have to please me sometimes too! :) Lydi**
as much as I love your Friday evening treats, this little pearl of wisdom clearly demonstrates your amazing versatility as a poet and a writer Lydi** and I do so hope my visit here today will encourage many others to follow :) Neville
Posted 6 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
You are such a wonderful fan of mine...and a friend! Thank you once again, Neville. Lydi**
Our thoughts eventually slip into that realm of unified understanding and all else pales in comparison!
We work to get there, but then one thought, one mind rules!
Wise words my friend!!
Oh I loved the philosophy here lydi! Wonderful. You speak a great truth for those who would head the wise perspective.
The format was a distraction. Your poetry was very strong and needed no "devise" to get the point across.
I honestly would change the deminishing font...
Otherwise, loved, loved and loved this poem.
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
Thank you, David. I appreciate your thoughts. I do enjoy playing with font size and indentation in.. read moreThank you, David. I appreciate your thoughts. I do enjoy playing with font size and indentation in my poetry. Perhaps it is distracting, but I have to please me sometimes too! :) Lydi**
"The eloquent erodes into gibberish"
and "we are all lost in the translation"
This is a very strong piece. The tick tock lets us know we are dealing with time or age here.
Loved your word choices. .. xo
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Thanks very much, Rose. Hope you are enjoying what's left of the weekend. Lydi**
I see this as a contemplation of life, and coming to terms with our own mortality. A poignant and reflective write. Not morbid, but realistic and somewhat resigned to the unstoppable future (unknown)transformation that awaits us all. Well penned, Lydi. ~ Robert.
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
I tend to be fatalistic, yes. What will be is going to be whether we accept it or not. Thank you f.. read moreI tend to be fatalistic, yes. What will be is going to be whether we accept it or not. Thank you for your comments. Lydi**
Beautiful write-and quite cryptic :) I love the crypt keeps ...this can allude to so many things in life...is this simply to mean...with a glance the depth is not seen? that only the outer layer or "rose" effect is what noticed...not the thorns? the cover...but not the story? and how time is just wasted? this is how I viewed this write in this space and time--Beautiful!!!
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Every interpretation is valid, my friend. Thank you so much. Lydi**