Hope

I wrote this off the top of my head after I came back from meeting with my therapist for the first time.

Hope.

That isn't a word I used often.

Words like "broken, beaten, betrayed, deceived."

Those were the words I said.

They used to fit my life.

Now, I have something to look forward to.

A change in my being.

The sun looks a little brighter today.

The sky looks a tad bit bluer.

The birds' song seems sweeter.

My family and friends seem more wonderful.

I am walking down a path that is not easy.

But, most paths never are.

The difference with my path is,

I can see the light ahead.

 

Reviews

[[Dark]]

i like your poem, its good, if i wrote the poem, which is real obvious i didnt... but if i did, i wouldnt have added the word hope for the last word. i think just

"i can see the light"

is enough for the closing. but, thats my view, and im not a great writer, so what do i know..... anywho! other then that, your poem is good. you created an entire poem on the word hope, and made the word mean something. you made the word yours, like all writers should do.

[Dalaina Renee]

Well,we all do that. When we need to hang on to hope!

[Fabian G. Franklin]

this is very uplifting...and a great piece of poetry too..is that the chinese word for hope? cool.

[Bhavya Kaushik]

This is according to me, by far your best work!
So stong, powerful and thoughtful it is...
"Words like "broken, beaten, betrayed, deceived."
Those were the words I said.
They used to fit my life.
Now, I have something to look forward to.
A change in my being." - I loved these lines a lot and can highly relate myself with it!
Great work...

[Steve Thompson]

the feel of the character seeing a unseen better, is herd in your piece. I felt the perception of a upswing coming, the brighter sun, the bluer skies.

[Fear Corrupts!]

This was very well done, short and sweet.

[LSS]

Love this piece, concise, keeps to the theme and conveys the message and the underlying expression that is in all of us, wanting release. I couldn't have expressed it better, a good write and without looking further - a good writer, be seeing you, want to read more of your works.
LSS

[Samuel Dickens]

You must always have hope. I have learned that it's true--no matter how bad things look, if you'll have hope that they''ll get better--they will. You have a lot to offer this world, young lady.