Secret

This is based off a very personal part of my life...

I have a secret

That nobody knows

Every day it gets stronger

The more that it grows

It shadows me in darkness

A black veil over my eyes

It makes me feel trapped

Like I’m buried alive

At times I can’t breathe

It just won’t leave me to be

It’s every one of my thoughts

It consumes all of me

The more that I cry

All the tears that may fall

The anger, the hurt

The shame of it all

Fighting is useless

I always feel weak

Ignoring it does nothing

But still salvation I seek

I know deep down inside

It will be what will end

My sanity, my life

My soul will never mend

 

I have a secret

That I’ll never tell

It bathes me in darkness

My own personal hell

Don’t ask me to say

You don’t want to know

The evil that hides

I never let it show

Reviews

[Ashley Camden]

An absolutely transparent piece. It is is wonderful that in the beginning you describe the feeling getting stronger and with the progression of the poem your words display the intensity of your heart really getting stronger and the burden getting heavier. You probably already know this but you are talented with rhymn!

[Ariell Cranor (Mispeled..]

Absolutely beautiful... Raw and real; the way writing should be.

[Ina]

Thank you so much for the review. I usually only write in the moment I feel those emotions. Forced writing just isn't the same. Not as therapeutic.

[Ariell Cranor (Mispeled Mermaid)]

Yeah, I know what you mean.

[Eli Jarman]

Very good. I like dark poems, great work

[Ina]

Thanks so much.

[Budding Jenny]

so dark this is.....wonderful

[Ina]

Thank you :)

[ron]

I love how your able to express your feelings without revealing them. I know how it feels to have secrets you need to keep to yourself. I have a few, I opened up to someone but it took a long time before I was ready. Very well written.

[Ina]

Thank you so much. Sometimes you so badly want to tell someone your secret but you just know you can't. So I expressed it with this poem which is as far as my secret will ever be to getting out.

[ron]

I know exactly what you mean. Some of my writings are the same way.

[ron]

I know exactly what you mean. Some of my writings are the same way.

[A. Amos]

I enjoyed this piece of art you have some talent and would love to come back to read more of your work...

[Ina]

Thank you :) I would love your opinion on my other work.

[A. Amos]

You're most welcome will do that and your most welcome on my page as well:)

[Coyote Poetry]

A powerful poem. I like the mystery of the secret. I believe the most of us have many secret best left dead and bury. I like the flow of thoughts leading to the logical ending. Best to keep secret. People can turn on you. No weakness in the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Ina]

Yes, I definitely agree with you. Most secrets shouldn't be told. They are kept secret for a reason.

[Eddie Davis]

Another well done, but dark poem. You are quite talented and I hope that you can overcome the demons that are tormenting you. I will wager you are as talented with the lighter side of life as you are in the darker moods.

[Ina]

Thank you! One day I hope so too, but doubtful. I honestly tried writing a happier poem and it just doesn't work for me unfortunately.