exlpaining love

trying to explain how much i love you...

is quite like proving there is a god.

Reviews

[Stacey]

Short poems are really nice sometimes. You've done a really good job of getting your idea across without wasting your breath. When I read this I feel like you're not only saying your love is indescribable like god but you're also saying it's just as meaningful and important.
Basically, I agree with everyone else. Keep writing!

[Heaven]

man, do i know that feeling...
=)

[EdFutinski]

extraordinary!

[Berenice]

i dont know how to describe this without saying something i havent already said. it's beautiful. it's... something. there's a saying "short, sweet, and to the point." this is exactly that. good job.

[Mandi (nothing else)]

this is............ amazing it's like the words that everyone is trying to get out but can't think of great job. by the way i found you on writers online. feel free to review mine im 13 soo they may not be that good but great job :)

[[untitled]]

wow. i really like this. i am hopelessly in love and believe in God, so the juxtaposition worked for me. i'm not sure of your religious beliefs, state of spirituality, etc. but it works whether the reader is a "believer" or an "unbeliever".

you can't explain God to someone who doesn't "want" to believe. the evidence will be ignored, debated, denied. just like you can't make someone believe you love them, if they don't want to believe you. where's the proof, show me, prove it. they would say, and if you have to prove it, where's the faith, trust, belief?

this is very good example of minimal word usage with maximum word impact: how "much" can i say in the fewest amount of words.

i will read your portfolio here, based on this one piece. you just got 100, my friend. please keep writing.

faith, hope and love, tristan
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[Lauren Xena Campbell]

Very simple words spelling out a deeper message. I really like this. It would be intresting to know if it was written for someone or just for the sake of writing. You have a great layout for your poem too, the words softly flowing down the page like a water fall, creating the want to read more as the lines become shorter. Really well done!