Candle Light

Under the stars, shadows of night,
There was lit a bright candle light.
Its shine, so pure and so bright,
Alone fought the darkness,
Away sent the fright.

At first it went easy,
It all went soo well.
For much longer it will burn.
Everyone could easily tell.

A while its been, since birth of flame,
Nights have passed, new shadow came,
Still it stands tall, in deepest night,
Burning hope, the candles light.

As sun went down, the fire rose,
To fight anew with its old foes.
It all went on for so so long,
The candle weakened,
The night still strong.
Many saw the hopeful light,
But now its will, nor scars, nor fight.
All they knew, there view was ill,
Candle did keep burning,
But its wounds did not heal.

It still goes on, after all that time,
Our warrior of hope and light,
Now stands bent and broken,
Illuminating his final night.

The night is over, the sun shall rise.
To see cold wax, written good byes.
The battle's lost, in depth of night.
Darkness took the candles light.

Reviews

[SSKaitlyn]

Goodness, that was breathtaking.

From start to end, and absolute delight to read. It's going in my favorites, to relish in later when I need a good read and inspiration. The rhyming is exquisite because it flows so well with the words and meanings. I can imagine it well, and I felt the sentiments it bares. I could probably go on about it, but I digress.

Be very, very proud of this. Well done, love. Well done.

[Haze]

Wow. Thats very kind of you. Thank you a lot.

[CMC]

Incredible, that's the word to describe this. The rhythm, the rhymes, and the progression were all beautiful. That last line is my favourite though, "The battle is lost, in depth of night. Darkness took the candles light." I think it represents the fresh hopes and dreams of a child being extinguished after fighting their final battle.

[Haze]

The song represtend exactly what you said, only it shows the growing problem of young people and children suicide in the past few years.

[CMC]

Suicide is a very dark path.

[Haze]

I know. Thats why i write about it. To show that those who suffer depresion, fight with darkness of life, that they arent alone in there pain.

[Matthew Kult]

Pleasingly classical

Great read

Matthew