She Wanted To Be Beautiful.

When everything became concealed 

she wanted to see the lines 

the lines of her rocks 

are they white and hard?



At times she compared herself

To those who bloom and grow tall

I guess she couldn't see anything.

Arched back 

won’t hide the wide stomach 

the fast pace won't make you 

Lose the weight of the world 

Not even your burdens 

But did i tell you that when you arched your back

Wings grew.

When you walked fast, you almost flew. 

When you sat the world stilled 

your grace has come home. 

But don't be dead 

your beauty will fade.

 

Reviews

[TheSecretWriter]

Sad and beautiful, melancholic and special.
I had to think about this poem a little bit until I was sure that I got the right meaning. You depicted somehow an anorexia that ended in death. But here the death is freedom and beauty, because "her grace came hom" only the last line is confusing with my theory...or is it about inner strenght and beauty? Whatever, it still is a readable poem!
LG The Secret Writer

[La Luna]

Thank you very much, I'm glad you got the story behind it. And the last lines is inner beauty the more you believe your not beautiful, and your dead inside, your beauty will fade like the dead. That was my idea. And at first I wasn't sure whether it would be understandable but hey you were close. And I like your interpretation very much :)

Luna ..

[TheSecretWriter]

Your actual meaning is wonderful, thank's for explaining it. The Secret Writer

[La Luna]

My pleasure. And thank you
Luna.

[A. Amos]

Deep, poignant and thought provoking piece of art..simply marvelous!

[La Luna]

Thank you Amos. Those are kind words, appreciate you stopping by :)
Luna.

[A. Amos]

Pleasure my dear friend

[Pax]

sometimes, or i kept reminding myself's worth is not about what people see in me, its about how our heart touches the good things of life, the good things that you have to cherish not the unnecessary things that are unimportant... inner beauty and strength flourish that never gets old... very nice piece...

[La Luna]

Exactly, as you grow old beauty eventually dies, but inner beauty never does. I like your explanation very true. Thank you.
Luna.

[Pax]

you're most welcome! keep it up and write more... :)