Distant Shores

A poem about Travel.

Distant Shores

 

 

I have an illness living inside of me. It swims through my veins, crawls around my rib cage like a serpent. It sleeps in my blood cells and breathes through my skin. It is very slowly devouring my soul. It digs deep down into my mind and buries its seed. It finally has engulfed my body.

It has become me!

 

 

My heart thumps vigorously for new encounters.

My eyes want new images to stimulate them.

My feet want to feel like they are alive.

My ears want to hear sounds that make them ring with joy.

My hands want to wave good-bye to new friends.

 

I have a bug living inside of me.

A travel bug!

 

  ©LukeRitta

 

Reviews

[Aarontastic]

I think you chose a great subject (travel), and you accurately describe how it feels to really have a love for it. I know I do, and reading over the 'my heart, my eyes' litany, I found that all of those lines resonated with me.

Overall though, this is a little too simple and 'safe' for me. It seems overly orthodox. The imagery throughout is decent, but I just feel like you could do more with it and express your love of traveling in a way that's more unique. On the other hand, I am still getting to know your style, and maybe this is what you are going for. I do like how you use those exclamatory statements in your work though, it makes it feel very passionate.

[Empirik]

I like this as I love to travel. At first I couldn't help but think of the movie Pulse. It felt really dark and almost like I was already dead and trying to take life to feel that again, but, then the ended lightened that all up for me. Good job!

[LadyNaida]

This is very interesting! I also love traveling and do not get the chance to do it often. I am itching to go to Hawaii again.

[Robbie~xoxo~]

It sounds like you have it bad... and the traveling is your cure... Destiny awaits you with limitless boundaries...

"It is very slowly devouring my soul. It digs deep down into my mind and buries its seed."~ Excellent...Love this! A Great write Luke!

[Coyote Poetry]

I had the travel bug in me for 10 years now. I need a long road trip with no place to go. Get on a highway and decide by a toss of a coin where to go? I like this poem. On the road life is better. Problems seem to be left behind. Thank you for a excellent poem.
Coyote

[Yari Garcia (Older Prof..]

The poem doesn't seem about a 'travel bug' at all, seems more serious. But I liked it. Pretty good.

[emmajoy]

Cleverly, instinctively put .. and so true. I'm relieved, probably like you, that there's no real cure for that bug. Your five 'My' have me nodding in agreement!

[Reeti]

It's startling how you've discerned what the bug particularly is at the end. The wanderlust of a traveler has been well versed. The imagery through varying types of perceptions (optical, thermal and aural ones) is admirable. It subtly signifies the pure passion of a traveler who gives way to the relentless desire to venture and find freedom.

[Poetic Beauty]

Traveling can be an amazing experience. New people and environments can change our attitude and behavior. It can be an uplifting soul healing experience.

Mmmm as long it's a good one, and never stops! LOL love this write Luke, always brilliant, please take some red wine too with every country you stop! it's good for the veins, and can relax the travel bug a bit ;) xx Stunning!

[Ruth]

Love this! Strange how the "bug" to travel yearns to shed our skin for newer shores, therefore newer experiences/people! Wonderful work xoxo