Rushing Wind

i hear two voices in my head

one tells me to jump

the other says don't

i'm torn between two decisions

in the end, the first voice wins out

 

i sigh and close my eyes

my knees bend

&& then i spring forward

i drop immediately

the wind slaps my face

and my eyes are watering

i watch the ground

as it grows larger

 

the breath is knocked out of me

my body is sore

i try to breath

time passes

i realize i am on the ground

grass is beneath my feet

i hear people approach me

they are saying my name

they ask if im okay

 

i look up at them

my eyes are wide

it went by so fast

from the jump to the ground

it was exhilirating

i smile widely

'i'm fine

but i love skydiving'

Author's Note

I was talking to my friend about my writer's block, and she told me to write a poem about skydiving. there for, this poem was written.

None of my poems are from personal experiences. They are all just from my imagination.

Reviews

[bailish]

Beautiful! The last lines were a surprise to me, because I thought you were describing a metaphysical experience, and I was going to write how the jumping off point was the point of decision that we all must reach in our lives, but now I can't.

I've never gone skydiving, so your description will be how I know it.

Thank you.

[Maria]

It's gripping, and holds onto you. This poem is amazing.

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I like this one Ashley. I really do. Nicely done. Surprise ending :) Keep up the good work!

[.::Cup^E^Cake*RaWr!*::.]

Wow this is sooooo beautiful I would have never known you had never done it before!!
Great write!!!

[These Haunted Hallways]

AHHHH!! Man, u had me there lol. Awesomely-creative poem, hun lol. My heart was beating so fast in this one hehe. Great twist, too! Loved it ;)

B.A.

[Laraine Davis]

haahah i luhv u ashley. that is so funny...the beginning was so serious and so intriguing, but the ending was simply brilliancy:)

[closed]

Oh my! I thought this was beautifuly written! I hope to go skydiving one day...but i'm afraid of heights ^_^;. Anyways I really, really enjoyed this!

[Gandré]

Very beautiful introvert experience with oneself....the words are there... they need to be formed... wait and smile... all will be allright. I like your poetical command here.
i sigh and close my eyes

my knees bend

&& then i spring forward

i drop immediately

the wind slaps my face

and my eyes are watering

i watch the ground

as it grows larger
-----------------------------------------this was to me a wonderful surrealistic view. Surrealistic means phantasmagorical, a sequence of real or imaginary images like that seen in a dream...... a nice work !!
(unfortunately, I don't have a friends list. thanks a lot for your interest. i keep my friends in my heart, i know where to find them and they know it, too. x gandr�)

[W.Piggy]

Ooooh. this is very nice.. I really like it.
Keep it up.. :D
Love,
W.Piggy

[Ari]

I enjoyed the twist at the end of this.