Rambling, Drifting Thoughts

Don't ask.. it's one of the one's that I found.. I barely remember writing it...

Rambling, drifting thoughts Stars collide Stars fade Dreams Drift, the Shy Flee... In the eyes of a child Your actions are so far The One You made me feel like the one You made me think you were the one Summer flings are fast and short Winter romances are meant to last Spring boasts of eternal love Fall hearts fall from above

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[Rambling Prose]

I was with you right up until the last line. The flow was sure and steady (in my opinion) until:

"Fall hearts fall from above" - I'm not quite sure as to why, but this line sort of threw the piece out of whack (for me). It would seem that the preceding lines demand a more fitting end to the thoughts. I don't even know if this makes sense to you, but it's just me sharing my rambling,drifting thoughts.

Nicely penned...