FREE PREVIEW #2 ::Enn Nacht

A short from my vampire series In The Blood. This happens before In The Blood 1 takes place. Listen for Free, and please review.

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Author's Note

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Reviews

[Lizanne]

Very interesting and holds the attention. Your graphic pics give the eye something on which to focus and helps to hold the interest. Maybe just a little more inflection into the voice. But all in all this is a good work and you can see the author has put a lot of effort forth. Good job and should attract an audience of those that like to listen to the stories, instead of reading. The storyline is a good one.

[Richard McLin]

My favorite from you yet. The music was a great touch to this piece. Very well done. I do kind of hope there will be more to it, I really liked it and would like to hear more continued. Very nicely done.

Richard.

[Debra Stevens Edwards (..]

Once again you astound me with a story so well told That I was pulled in and held captivated by the story.This seems to be another feather in your cap my friend. It was intriguing and spellbinding, I thoroughly enjoyed the story.

[Greg Close]

A good action piece with nice local details that really brought the setting alive. I don't know if the WoF format really moved this particular work along, but I can definitely see the potential. I would have liked to see a little bit of the combat in illustrated form, for example. Although, some of the stylized shots and coloring were cool. The hinted back story was nice, and intriguing enough to garner interest in learning more.

[Scottie]

Very cool, hope to read more :)

[Hannah Monttkomepy]

It was very good for the most part. There are just a couple of things I'd like to tell you.

1.) The emotion in your voice. The chase scene was fine but if you had shown emotion in your voice it would've made me on the edge of my seat probably. But maybe your not supposed to show emotion in your voice for your type of writing or whatever, in which case the wording I think should have been different. I just felt like that part was something that should have been suspenseful and it wasn't for me.

2.) I got confused at the beginning with the whole he has to change his identity. Maybe it's just that it was a preview that it didn't make sense to me though. I don't know.

However, one of the things I really liked was how you used an accent when the man was speaking. It just felt more realistic that way and it added to the quality of your story/preview a lot. Overall though, very nicely done =D

[Tobi]

It reminded me of being told a story as a child and the images complimented it perfectly as i found it extremely reminiscent of the style of pictures that would form in my head whenever i would hear a story when i was young.

[Tim H]

The story has a strong popular appeal. I think that you could improve some of the action sentences with stronger verbs. You may want to add a longer music intro so crappy computers like mine won't hiccup all over the words as it buffers. Is there anyway you could provide the text after the story? It is just tough to critique without the ability to be specific. I'm not up on my vampire lore, so I'm not sure why water would bring such a final end to their pursuit. Good action sequence.

[Naomi Montana Walsh]

I like the concept of little illustrated stories ...I found the story interesting.. there were a few odd sentances ..I wish, I had a written copy ..what I mean by odd is the one regarding the ramp..seemed contrived . Still all in all a good write.

[Through the Gateway]

This was a pretty good action sequence. "Addicted" vapires intrigued me, as well as the MCs real identity. Kept my interest and was written well.

[Sheila Kline]

TERRIFIC!!!....is my first, middle, and lasting impression! I just love the "read aloud" concept, and the visuals that accompany your vampire story. I like the way you introduce the color orange in the beginning - as it ties everything together with the "sameness", and then as the story unfolds, there is so much action, and downright good drama that I was hanging onto every word of it!

I have only written two vampire poems, so I am not versed in vampire lore, but your read is certainly most entertaining!! I have to check out your site to hear more of the series!!