She Floats

She Floats is an Audio poem that is entirely Free. Can't wait to hear reviews!

Let me know what you think!

Reviews

[CircusNerd]

i feel like this is a literal larger than life view of something that goes on in everyday life. when someone feels under-appreciated or unloved, it's easy for them to fall on others who suddenly appear out of nowhere and supposedly give that lonely person the "support" they need. and if this person goes far enough, that someone might just be willing to throw everything else away without thinking about their sentimental value and importance. great job :-)

[dusk1107]

very cool poem... from the title to the very last word, this work of art was quite captivating. It draws the reader in, and really makes you think about the topic. At first, I wasn't sure who "she" was, but once it was revealed, it really left an impact, great work!

[Word Mutiny]

wow, this was really good. i like earth's little psychotic episode.
i also like how your stuff is all spoken word with a bit of music, it's a breath of fresh air! although i love to read, i sometimes lose concentration with so many words on a page. but being able to hear your poems is like being spoken to, it's like music. you're making sure that the "reader" is experiencing your words the way you imagine them in your head, i think that's great! :)

[Lauren Marie]

I liked it!
It was sad and eerie ... but also happy in a sense.
I got that we really should take care of the earth and appreciate her more.
Great poem!
~Lauren

[Water_the_Sun]

I love this:)

I wasnt expecting the ending, i was pleasantly surprised:P Not only is it well written, its well performed as well, though im not a huge fan of the music, it kind of distracted me at the beggining and threw me off, but i think that taking it out would have a different effect, as in i dont think itd be as powerful without the music.

The piece itself flows well, and is really easily understood, as far as the individual words go, your annunciation is perfect.

All around a beautiful piece:P i look forward to reading the rest:)

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

A wonderful wof. Great job Lucien. Thank you for sharing. Debileah

[Cherrie Palmer]

Great delivery of a poem I enjoyed it very much but i agree with Lizzy you need to post the words as well. Not everyone has speakers and they are missing out. Very nice I liked it. Cherrie

[Lizzy]

Hey, awesome job!!
Your poems are all really interesting, and really good but I think I know why you aren't getting as many reviews as you'd like.
The audio aspect is really awesome and I think you're a really good storyteller, but it would be a lot better if you had the words underneath the audio so that reviewers could really tell you how to improve by quoting it and looking at the rhyme pattern. Awesome job and Good Luck!