Slaughter

Where trees once kissed the skyline

I find ribs upon a cage

Where pristine borders now entwine

I once bore twinkling stage

Where honey once did glisten

Upon my eager lips

I find they are now lapping

By pools of precipice

For harmony now lacking

Guides my beatless march

I can but stride on deeper

Into the binding dark

And yet you say my light is bright

As if I carry it so well

But to me the light is blinding

And it carries me through hell

I hold my mask as it’s too heavy

to hold upon my head

In hands as I lay weeping

For the lands that I have tread

And call to god to save me

Though I know him to be dead

And just as real my hope is

Life is but a shadow of its stead

So tell me again how I am pretty

With your petty shallow thoughts

And not the courage to call me meaty

For all the weakness that I’ve wrought

A heart upon a sleeve is but the slaughter to a kill!

And I forever always, bending to its will

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

You are a very good writer. You make the words come alive and understood by the reader.
"So tell me again how I am pretty
With your petty shallow thoughts
And not the courage to call me meaty
For all the weakness that I’ve wrought"
I love the above lines. We need people who like us as-is. Thank you Lucia for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Lucia]

Thank you for your appreciation, I hope to keep more of my writing clearer like this one

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked this one and you are welcome.

[Will Harcourt]

A lot of personal information here. I like the threads you wove into this piece. I get the inner pain that comes from the life events that we control. The disappointment. Glad to see that you are writing elegant poems like this one to express it.

[KCthelastboyscout]

Powerful.amazing words to read. Whatever that was inside you that made it necessary to write this it was worth it. very impressive

[Lucia]

thank you!

[Alexa Apothic Red]

Ooh!! This is so hauntingly beautiful! An exquisite piece! I love your choice of words! I'll comment more specifically later but wanted to tell you how much I appreciated reading your piece!!

[Paul Bell]

This is a real journey of despair.
A lot of asking going on. But no answers coming back.
I'm not religious. But it feels like a test of faith.
You leave a lot of questions in your writes. Like that.

[Unspoken poet]

I hold my mask as it’s too heavy
to hold upon my head
In hands as I lay weeping
For the lands that I have tread

WOW! I enjoyed this write, I really enjoyed this stanza. you are very poetic, I enjoy your style. Hope you write more.

[Lucia]

I'm so glad you enjoyed it! Thank you!! I'll be sure to keep posting, I'm loving this site so far!