Perfection

His perfection seemed unlike any other man i've met
 His smile could make my heart melt
 He seemed like a dream I never woke up from
 His eyes were deep and they put me into a trance
 His sweet soft lips gently brushed against mine
 His touch is light and sweet
 He makes my heart whole
 He spoils me down to my core
 He is everything and more
 He makes me feel so alive
 He makes life worth living
 I am completely his
 I am so much in love with him
 He completes my soul.

 

Reviews

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>_< WOW!

[Your Victim]

I enjoyed the way you were able to reveal all of the components of your perfect man without using the term more than once... that is difficult to accomplish. The opening and closing lines were probably my favorites...
I only have a single critisism... "He makes me heart whole" I believe, should be "He makes my heart whole"
Other than that minor typing error, I enjoyed reading this very very much.

[17thWhitePrince]

wow ... very nice
I liked how you described his perfection in every way
and I especially liked how you ended the poem by saying
"He completes my soul."

very very nice indeed !!!
a most wonderful piece !!!

[Sammy]

This is a totally awesome poem.

[Wildecat]

I think it is absolutely wonderful when you can find that special someone. Nice write.

I like your method of conveying how this person is perfect to you.