Eclipse

Hahahaha! The last one I wrote, lmao, was the first poem I put on here. Lol, I'm sorry, my mistake. Enjoy this one, please! I did write this when I was ten.

Darkness reaches out
Capturing the moonlight
In a fight of control.
The wolves howling shouts
Die down to whimpers.
There will be no howling
This early, fateful night.

Whispers of the wind
In the brown and yellow leaves.
The darkness covers all
In a cloaking like fear.
The ones who are big
Feeling so very small...


Darkness covers all for
Minutes at a time.
Apocolypse?
No, of course not.
Just a wonderful Eclipse.
I dampened darkness
Of the white mind
In the black night sky.

Author's Note

Grammer, spelling, anything wrong, please criticize it! BUT also enjoy it!!

Reviews

[deeps]

Here is this scene, sketched in the moonlight.
Here is this scence, sketched in black and white.

The Moonlight Shines Down on the Moor

I loved these lines here,
I really enjoye dthe whole write,
Amazing write here.
Lovely flow.

[topsyturvy]

Oh I enjoyed it alright :P Can't believe that you wrote this when you were ten! Great job!
Etching out lines like ribbons in it's core.--> I think "it's" should be its :)

Here is this scene, sketched in the moonlight.
Here is this scence, sketched in black and white.
--> Something's a little off with the grammar I think when you said "Here is this" But don't mind it much it's a great piece!!

Oh and lastly, I dunno the spelling of nightingale if it's that or if it's double t.. Either way, the content is great so don't mind it!:P