Back in the Atmosphere

She's back after time alone. He has noticed her. She claims she's changed. Will he see her change?

She comes back that night
Not wanting a fight
He notices the change
And finds it quite strange
They have had no communication,
A chance to fix their relation
She fakes it awfully well
For a cover up of her personal hell
He stands in the sideline
Watching her pretend to be fine
They don’t stare
Neither of them can bare
She silently slips out
Nobody noticing without a doubt
He follows her
Remaining a bit unsure
Their chat takes a turn into bliss
Passion reveals itself in their kiss
Indeed, he can now see her alteration

Reviews

[Havatara]

I didn't really understand what the message of this poem was and you needed to work on puncuation a bit, but the words flowed really nicely and with a bit of editting this will be a magnificent poem!!

[Marilu Elizabeth]

i like it nice write