The Darkness

The Darkness,

I see it coming,

I see it coming around me.

I feel it go over me,

go away, leave me alone.

I feel it take over my body.

As it takes over me,

I can feel my orignal soul leave me.

My soul is now darkness,

a blackened pit of hatred.

My heart gets sucked into that blackened pit.

The darkness has compleatly taken over.

I am not myself anymore,

I am the darkness who takes over others,

like the other that took over me.

Reviews

[Patricia(:]

Wow..This was deep. I like it. It's deep, with a dark touch(: Perfect.

[BrokenJuliet]

That was beautiful and it so made sense. This would have to be one of my favourites.

[Alittlepertubed]

nice write good use of your emotions

[deeps]

I am not myself anymore,
I am the darkness who takes over others,
like the other that took over me.

I like these lines here, this is amazing write
I can feel the feelings in this.

[Trevor]

My only advice for this is to cut down a bit on how many lines start with "I"...you could change the sentence structure a bit so that you don't start have of the lines in the poem the same way. Other than that, I like it :)