Alone.

Alone and lost.

With no where to go.

Please don't come near me.

 I'm afraid my true feelings might show.

I thought this was real,I thought it would last.

I guess I was wrong.

My heart shattered like glass.

Hurt and confused.

Don't know what to do.

Forgive me for saying this

But I still love you.

Old memories they come and go.

But the feelings forever stay.

Now if you excuse me I must go away..

 

 

                       ♥

Reviews

[Blake Blackstone]

I like this poem.. it was very relatable. Short and simple. Only problem I see is you forgot to put a space after the comma on the fifth line and you put a space before "I'm" on the fourth line but that's just me being O.C.D. Keep up the good work. :)

[Vintage]

I like this poem. I know all too well the feelings you portrayed. Nice.

[Hello, Goodbye]

very bad feelings, but here they are very well put.. its pain that hurts us and bring us down but its all about how we choose to deal with those feelings that count.. good job in making good poetic expressions out bad sentiments...

[Demauscian]

A very sad and heart felt poem.

My critiques are as follows:
I am unsure what the rhyming scheme is, it seems to flicker about. Maybe there is no rhyming scheme, but then it seems that many of the lines intentionally rhyme.

Also, in the forth line you start with "For..." which doesn't match the wording style of the rest of the poem, I would suggest removing that word and leaving the rest as is.

Thank you and good luck.

[Revenge<3'sMe]

Beautiful, sad, but beautiful