Heat

Another Haiku. Hopefully the deeper meaning is able to be seen. Believe it or not I try. (and fail)

 

My candel is out

I can find another match

that will bring more heat

Author's Note

please be honest =] I got the idea from looking at the pic, so I hope it helped to see it. Please tell me if you thought it was to distracting.

Reviews

[darkroseX3]

I love it :) Though, when I read it, it rewrote itself into a more depressing version (lol guess that's how my mind works)

[Momo the Elf]

Ooo cool pic! haha. Anyway, yes I can definitely see the deeper meaning here! And you most certaintly did NOT fail. Even though I'm not too particular to haikus, this one is very good. I like it, keep it up :)

[Susan14]

this is really amazing, the first two lines of the poem, give you a chill but when you read the word heat in the last line, the chill's went away. The picture added to the effect as well. The words are really powerful. Keep up the good work!

[John W. Herron]

Words are definitely power. Reading the first 2 lines of the poem, I felt cold inside, but then I reached the word "heat" in the last line and the chillness was remedied. The picture added to the effect as well. Good job!

[Aldora Sparrow]

Picture prompts are pretty amazing stuff. Especially it gives life to something beautiful such as this. I really enjoyed the picture of gentle and a fire that still burns. Your picture just made it all the better. This made me smile. Keep up the good work~