When will Winter Come?

Tell me how this poem really makes you feel? Enjoyable, or is their further meaning? yeah, I know it's to long.

He holds on tight with all his might

ginving it his all, he takes a deep

bracing himself, knowing what's coming

that strong, wild wind

 

The powerful wind whips around this way and that

helpless, he can't take it anymore

 

His briliant colors shine in the light

the bright sun's rays are golden

but prettier than gold

with much more worth

 

The powerful wind whips around this way and that

helpless, he can't take it anymore

 

The sun is shining brighter now

making him transparent, nearly translucent

an extrodinary sight to see

the last leaf on the tree

 

The powerful wind whips around this way and that

helpless, he can't take it anymore

 

Should he let go?

isn't it his job to keep Fall intact?

is it worth it anymore?

holding on to the sands of time is tough

 

The powerfulk wind whips around this way and that

helpless, he can't take it anymore

 

Keeping Winter from coming and Fall in place

is rough when your all alone

letting go, not meddeling with destiny

it crosses his mind as it has done so before

 

The powerful wind whips around this way and that

helpless, he can't take it anymore

 

Blink and breath, it's hard for a leaf

the lonliness has concealed his for too long

let the next season move on

it can't be Fall forever

 

The powerful wind whips around this way and that

helpless, he can't take it anymore

 

The leaf looks up at the sun

exased, she needs a break

but not the clouds

they are full enough to cast flurries

 

The powerful wind whips around this way and that

helpless, he can't take it anymore

 

They depend on him

Winter will or will not come, due to his choice

now is the time

the current addresses this situation with glee

 

The powerful wind whips around this way and that

helpless, he can't take it anymore

 

The leaf takes one last look at the ground

"I'm coming my friends!"

uncertain yet curious

he begins his decent

 

The powerful wind whips around this wway and that

helpless, he can't take it anymore

 

down in magical spirals he goes

as the Sun,Clouds, Wind, and Winter cheer solemnly

a smile forms as he hit the ground and untenses

among friends, he can finally rest

 

 

Author's Note

How does it make you feel?
I feel relieved.

Reviews

[{Angel Redd}[Formerly A..]

Very imaginative. I loved the way it unfolded as you read it, so that the ending was not anti-climactic.

[Susan14]

wow, this is amazing, I love the flow of the poem!!!! the repetitiveness gives it a certain rhythym to it. the ending is so powerful and yes i can sense a deeper meaning behind it :) great job! give it up

[Heather Rodwell]

Lots of imagery and very lyrical. It makes me feel peaceful at the end.

[Momo the Elf]

wow~ i love the flow of this poem!!! the repetitiveness gives it a certain rhythym. the ending is so powerful, and yes i can sense a deeper meaning behind this. :) great job!

[A]

The poem also makes me feel relieved.

Relieved that another poet has found relief in getting their ideas on paper. Gosh, I have such a bad case of Writers Block...

Back to the writing, over all, very nice. It's sort of repetitive, and looks like lyrics a bit, but flows very nicely.