Say it

I just wrote this, doesn't really have any substance or background story though...

 

The same lies
over and over again
it this state
how can we still be friends?

Say what you mean kid,
before you fake it
before it's too late
for us to make it

You talk to fast
and think less and less
only for you
listening is a mess

Say what you mean kid,
before you fake it
before I'm out of here
I just can't take it

The truth is out
you sigh and nervously smile
we'll be all right
at least for a while

because you said what you meant kid,
before you faked it
now it's not too late
I know we'll make it

 

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Aldora Sparrow]

I agree with Heather Rodwell. This is a song and it sort of reminded me of Far Away by Nickelback because chorus was

"That I love you/I have loved you all along/And I miss you/Been far away for far too long/I keep dreaming you'll be with me/and you'll never go/Stop breathing if/I don't see you anymore"

and at the very end, the same format of teh words except it took on a new meaning

"Cause I needed/I need to hear you say/That I love you/I have loved you all along/And I forgive you/For being away for far too long/So keep breathing/'Cause I'm not leaving you anymore/Believe it/Hold on to me and, never let me go/Keep breathing/'Cause I'm not leaving you anymore/Believe it/ Hold onto me and never let me go"

Sort of a vague connection, but whatever. My point is, I really liked its frankness and yet so poetic. Lucia Hwaiting! XD

[Heather Rodwell]

Get some background music. This is not a poem, this is a song, and a good one at that.

[A]

Once again, it looks like lyrics, but what wonderful lyrics they are indeed. The writing had lots of emotion, and was written fluently while still staying strong and sharp. (That's probably really hard to understand... xD) Nice work. =D

[smiggle wiggle]

This is really good!

[Momo the Elf]

love it!!! its nice how you start it off kind of dark and end it with a slightly optimistic outlook :)