Tears

Original poem, on booksie I put: Light Tear Drops, this is the original version.

Tears as wet as rain
 Pierces his Heart
As the flame goes out with just a single drop of water

Tears as clear as air
 I see where they stained
The look makes your heart die

Tears that touched the earth
I saw the tears that dropped like rain
 Clear as Air
Glittery like a Crystal
 They touched the earth
And the sky lost it's blue
 The earth is now wet
 With tears that will never go away

Reviews

[alesuriko]

The structure needs some work. The metaphors and the imagery feel like you were reaching to hard to make them fit but they aren't bad. It has potential though.

[*~Kristy~*]

BEAUTIUFUL!!!