Heartbreak

Missing the past, everything in it.

I still remember the times we’ve spent

The magnificent memories of the past

Holding the promises that we’ve said

But now it’s enclosed by countless tears

 

Is it possible to return those we had?

Could it be better or just worse?

Am I girl that was horribly bad?

Just let me shout all my remorse

 

I miss your kiss, your hug, your smile

Loving you forever is a MUST to me

I’ve been thinking ‘bout you for awhile

This is ME loving you truthfully

 

Please, come back. . .I love you. . .

SO MUCH. . . 

Author's Note

I know this poem is horrible, as what I said in my profile, I am not that good at writing down things so please, do not be harsh. It is just I remembered him again. I want to see him once more even for the last time.

Reviews

[stars are far]

This was so sweeet ..it is not horible ..
and you must know that it is not important for you to be professional at writing cause poems is expressing feelings not being perfect in writing ..
so keep expressing you feeling and then you will be perfect .. trust me :)
and by the way i miss him too :(

[Sleeping Maiden]

Awww, nooo this is not horrible! it's beautifully written. It's quite sweet. Heart breaks truely hurt the most. Missing everything both did.. -sigh- it's hard to let go. But i can't say that it'll be easier because people have said it too many times even I. And I realized.. that it doesn't happen that fast. So, all I can say is.. remember it.. cry..write.. you gotta pour everything out from your broken heart. Then it's all about time... someone else will come along and take that unhappiness and make you happy again! I loved how you expressed your feelings here. Great write!

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

I love this poem....feeling captured are spot on....
and flow is perfect too...
and the sentiment of a love coming back/loving again is always
yearned for and missed...esp if it was good....
Terific piece :)

[A Risen Heroine.]

Damn... I could relatejust 6 months ago!
A heartbreak is one of the most painful thing's to experience!!
Damn... I love this poem...

"I miss your kiss, your hug, your smile
Loving you forever is a MUST to me"

Damn... I really dig into those lines...
Loved it!!!

~A Fallen Heroine~

[Thea]

Aw! This is too sad! :(((
I really love the second stanza...And...Oh yah, don't underestimate your work! It wasn't horrible...I actually find it great!
Keep writing, Layla! :)))