Nowhere

I feel numb.
I feel nothing.
My mind knows nothing.
I'm nowhere, nowhere.

Nowhere.
Just the place I want to be.
The perfect paradise.
I'm nowhere, nowhere.

Alone is what I am.
Stuck in this paradise.
Feeling almost perfect.
I'm nowhere, nowhere.

Everything is right.
Leaving.
Forgetting all about you.
I'm nowhere, nowhere.

Since it's all right.
I don't want to be found.
Don't wish nor dare to be.
I'll always be nowhere, nowhere.

Reviews

[ewest1220]

Interesting. Love the bleak feel of the whole piece. Well done!

[Amadi Judith]

An interesting read. The technique of repitition is instrumental. Tells a story of heartbreak and estranged and how they feel. Loveless and nowhere.

[CharlyeMonroe]

you should read thomas nagel's the view from nowhere

[DoNt LoSe YoUrSeLf]

Okay, I'll be sure to look into it sometime :)

[CharlyeMonroe]

not really a review just a heads up :)

[DoNt LoSe YoUrSeLf]

Haha, not a problem! Thanks anyway though :)

[Chris]

Its 2AM and I heard a sound
looked up then out
nothing but the wind
blown branches
cold, empty... winter torn.

I listened to the silence a bit
looked again
and again...
catch a breath
hold it...hold ...it
lay down... down
quiet, silent...down.

It's 2:30 now
and startin' again...
and again...

[Samoda]

this poem hooked me from the beginning stanza, i think the word flow was really nice, good use of repetition and i was able to get a feel of what you were pouring out.
lovely poem

[Canicus]

the way it goes from sad to hopeful back to sad is awesome it's probably a hard thing to pull off, but you did it. good job.

[DoNt LoSe YoUrSeLf]

Haha, thanks! And yeah, I liked to put in a transition from sad to hopeful and back. I'm not very good at it, but glad to know I pulled it off :)