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I couldn't tell people
What was inside my head.
Cause all I'm able to do
Is picture you dead.
People will know about your going away.
Always thinking about what
I could've said to make you stay.

For too long I've kept this secret.
When all I wanted to say was 'I love you'.
But even with saying that
There wasn't much else I could do.
Asking how long it would be
Until I see you again.
Now that you've said 'Hello' to Satan.

Here at night, I let the tears fall.
Since we've met
I gave you me, heart and all.
From then on we were forever strong.
Yet, I can still say that
Even though you're long gone.

Reviews

[KeeD]

The whole piece had amazing flow to it, good imagery, emotional sentiment and also some emotional distress.
"Until I see you again.
Now that you've said 'Hello' to Satan."
this confused me a bit, because it got me to think that the love,muse,person this is for is in hell now, or sold his soul and I just kept thinking of scenarios where this would play out to the story you've told in this poem, everything added up no matter what the story and a piece that makes the reader think, is always a good piece. Great write.

[DoNt LoSe YoUrSeLf]

The whole Satan part was supposed to somewhat tell how I would see him again now that's he's gone to Hell, meaning he killed himself...which would mean in order to see him again, I would have to kill myself as well, to end up where he did.

[KeeD]

Right that makes complete sense :) because yeah people who commit suicide are shun'd away from heaven, to hell or purgatory. Thats deep and yeah, now i wanna read more of your stuff :P kind of a fan already haha.

[DoNt LoSe YoUrSeLf]

Haha, read all you want honestly. It's all here, so feel free :)