Jumping Fish

I got bored in class.

Jumping Fish!

I sit here on this bench.

I hear the wispy wine,

Go by me.

I can hear the fish.

It flys over me,

With water coming behind it.

I can see a rainbow

The fish looks at me. 

Then the fish happily,

Goes back.

It jumps out one,

Last time.

Looks back and says,

Thank you!

Reviews

[Kevin]

Interesting poem. I have to agree with Harmony on simple words; the flow of your piece is choppy and a bit difficult to read.

[H-Jonesy]

Hm a little advise, when you write poetry you don't have to describe every little detail that goes on.
EX: I can hear the fish.

It flys over me,

With water coming behind it.

I can see a rainbow


You can use simple words.
Like in the line
"With water coming behind it"
You could have said, water following it.
Keeping your poems simple helps the flow.
But thats just me.
Very good start keep it up