The End Of This Battle

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I’ll remember you in autumn
Pretty colors, orange, red
Though I’m left to wage these winters
Icy, frozen, bare and dead
There will always be your smile
And your laughter in my ear
When you were near I saw so clearly
That will never disappear we
Were Romeo and Juliet
I held a single rose
Now time slows,
The clocks froze
And I am standing where our love goes
Does the wind blow where you are?
Are the night skies filled with stars?
Or are they shards of broken hearts
Shining through your iron bars, like mine?
These nights make me feel real
Almost as real as my life slipping
Steal it in a vice grip we
Slip into this mind trip
A page rips
Our song skips
Hate dripping from your angel lips
I will slip into a coma
Just to remember how your heart beats
And I’ll hardly whisper, ‘Sorry..’
As you wrap your arms around me
Sweetly ground me with your kiss
Bring me to life inside this bliss
And I miss you
I always miss you
I insinuate my issues
Scriptures, pencil marks on tissues
Scraps of paper I can’t give you
The poison my heart keeps creeps skin deep
And
your dead garden sleeps, where I sleep
These dreams are a cheap
Imitation.
I breathe with hesitation,
a fixation on sedation to  cancel out
this concentration, desperation
And just in case when
I leave this place in
case you forget my voice and my face,
I am a body mapped and bruised
Dotted lines that lead to you, and me
and usually
It’s brutally dismembered by reality
This gallery of tragedy
Your hands around my neck left me bitter, week, and wrecked
I regretfully resent every word you never meant
Every night I barely slept with my head inside this mess
A red dress, I stood impressed
Naturally my heart possessed
My chest breaking under stress
Yes my HEAD IS IN THIS MESS
So I’ll remember you in Autumn
Pretty colors, orange, red
Though I’m left to wage these winters
Icy, frozen, bare and dead.

 

Reviews

[Raven]

Very discriptive of the feelings and images that are told. A great read and I loved it. Enough said. Good job!

[17thWhitePrince]

WoW ... interesting indeed !!!
Very very well done & well written !!!
I liked it !!!
I loved how it ended !!!

"So I'll remember you in Autumn
Pretty colors, orange, red
Though I'm left to wage these winters
Icy, frozen, bare and dead."

[An owl on the moon]

Powerfully moving, tender, deep, sometimes laced in mist... So beautiful, voiced like lyrics to a bittersweet song... Amazing!