Candles To The Stars

Ever thought for a moment you might be able to wish something true? Believe in it so fervently and with purity that it might truly come to pass? Candles to the stars, darling.. candles to the stars

And sometimes the inspiration comes from believing in the promise of the night, and her lovely sky that holds the cards..

“Candles To The Stars”

I am holding candles to the stars

And wishing upon them all

I cannot handle this distance

This inescapable desert

Barren and frigid

Sweltering and surreal

That exists between us

If I were point A on a map

And B were my destination

Would you be there for me?

Waiting and meticulously gauging

The miles I ought traverse

In a broken down charter

You " my stellar cartographer

And I the desperate man

On the oldest-of-them-all mission

Hoping that time would pass

As quickly as the burn

Of the wax I feel 

Dripping down my arm

Causes me to blister

I am holding candles to the stars

And wishing upon them all

Sear the words into me

On my scar-riddled chest 

And just above

My naked left breast

Stain my soul with your whisper

I am so impatient

So impatiently listening

For any of the saccharine song

That might ever so softly escape

Your crimson-pressed lips

I am holding candles to the stars

And wishing upon them all

Breathe three words into me

And grant me life from this 

Cursed existence I have led

Allow me precious moments

To breathe without fear

Repeating your promise

As therein I find true solace

Within your sacred beauty

Within your seraph’s wings

I am holding candles to the stars

And I’m wishing upon them all

And I’m waiting for you

Waiting for you, love,

Waiting for you to fall

© Brian Milici

April 6, 2015

May you always find your smile.

Author's Note

Feedback adored! :)

Reviews

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

This stanza is my favorite:
"Breathe three words into me

And grant me life from this

Cursed existence I have led

Allow me precious moments

To breathe without fear

Repeating your promise

As therein I find true solace

Within your sacred beauty

Within your seraph’s wings"--I love the flow here and the unique writing of your words
capturing true emotions.
Then, you follow with your ending stanza that says it all
and more!
Nice write and inspiring thoughts.

[Brian]

Thanks so much, Josie. I really enjoy your writing and the feedback you give is always a true highlight for me!

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

You are welcome.

[GreenEyedPoet]

"Sear the words into me
On my scar-riddled chest
And just above
My naked left breast
Stain my soul with your whisper
I am so impatient
So impatiently listening
For any of the saccharine song
That might ever so softly escape
Your crimson-pressed lips"

I loved the whole piece, but this part was definitely my favorite. So beautifully written!

[Brian]

You honor me with your kind words, your time reading this, and also with such a helpful review. The best kind are finding out what does and does not stand out. Thank you so much!!!

[GreenEyedPoet]

Yea I always like hearing what parts of my pieces stand out to people too. :)
And you're welcome! :)

[Brian]

Isn't that so much better than the generic "I l iked it!" or "Good job!"

Feedback is feedback, of course, but I guess I'm just into details. Thankye again!

[GreenEyedPoet]

Haha yea. Sometimes I can't do that though, I just really like the whole thing that I can't pick one part or line that really stood out! Lol.

[Brian]

Oh, sure sure sure.. already with the excuses! kidding, kidding.

I agree with you.

[GreenEyedPoet]

Hahaha... :P

[Brian]

Hey. You're smiling.

So mission accomplished. ;)

[GreenEyedPoet]

Hehe yay. :)

[Brian]

I'll take that as an admission of smile-age. :D

[GreenEyedPoet]

Haha I'll never tell! :P

[Brian]

It has worked! You have given everything away!

I'm a Sicilian. ;)

[GreenEyedPoet]

Have not! Lol.

What does that mean? Lol

[Brittany Zedalis]

When I read the title and the first few lines, I immediately thought of an event that happens during the winter around here every year. It's Brookgreen Gardens' Night of a Thousand Candles. It's a beautiful event; I've been 3 or 4 times.

Anyways, back to your poem:
You are remarkably talented. It's one of those poems that just makes one sigh with agreement. Beautiful work, Brian.

[Brian]

Aw, well, I thank you for the most incredible and equally undeserved compliments! It means a lot. read moreAw, well, I thank you for the most incredible and equally undeserved compliments! It means a lot.

Aww, that sounds like an absolutely breathtaking experience. I would so enjoy that, I think. Does it change every year or is it just something to witness that has brought you back again and again?

I am an emotional and passionate person. That's all I hope that comes through.

Thanks again so much, aww.

[~]

Awestruck romantic write!! I love the passion and the alluring imagery. Some burning wishing candles you've got to compete with the stars :)

[Brian]

Aw, well, if only candles could compete with stars I think they'd be a booming industry. Wait a minute, it seems like everywhere I go now someone is selling scented candles in more flavors and smells than there are in ice cream. Which says something, cause there's some craaaazy ice cream out there now. heh. Thanks so much for the feedback.

[~]

gasp.. don't tell me - are you with the Ice-cream makers? ;)

[Brian]

haha, if I was, I'd be wayyy fatter and maybe even happier than I am now. lol.

So no! :D

[~]

darn it!!! i thought i could put in my two cents for some new flavors :D

[Brian]

I'll give you a nickel to hear which flavors you're absolutely craving haha.

[~]

ahh, not a penny anymore? bah! relentless inflation!

[Brian]

Isn't a nickel better than two cents?

I'd give you a penny for your thoughts, but I felt that was undercutting your original two cents! I thought you were worth three more! lol.

[Kristan A. Mohammed]

Wow this is such a beautifully magical. I love the scenery you have created as well as your choice of words and lingo. Its so littered with solitude and desolate loneliness. I can really relate to these feelings. And I think that the way you ended it was magnificent.

Waiting for you to fall.

Keep up the good work. Stay inspired.

[Brian]

Thank you, Kristan! I appreciate it. I'd love it if all of them were so easy to write, but sometimes they just tumble, don't they? The words just fit and fall. I hope you're having a splendid evening and thanks for the feedback! :)