Secret Demons

The type of secrets that tear your soul apart...

I have secret demons
I live with them night and day
They live in my head
Everytime I smile
I hear one whisper I remember what you've done…

 

I have secret demons
Who now own my heart
Everytime I start to care
They slowly  begin to pick it apart
One slightly whispers don’t you begin to start

 

I have secret demons
I try to keep at bay
Everytime I think I’m winning
One whispers
We’re not going away, we're always here to stay

 

My secret demons want to spead the truth
They care not who they hurt
My secret demons just want to be released
On the world to wreak havoc
They don’t care who they hurt.

 

As long as I never love another
They can never be released
So no tears can be shed
No love can be shared

 

I have secret demons who want to be release… to tear our love apart....

Reviews

[MAC]

okay so i have to say something about this then off to bed. WOW!!! seriously. this flows to perfection and is incredibly original. It reminds me of a Shel Silverstein poem but believe it or not much better. Has content that every adult and unfortunately some children can completely understand and have lived. Excellent my friend!!

[Ryzo]

Loved this poem! I think you've started a thing here, think we all have secret demons in us somewhere. :)

[Ladysue]

oh yes don't we all? they do reside in us at times and oh how they push for release...nicely penned...

[Inyourshadow]

I use my demons to pen my pieces they live caged with only typewriters for amusement, they feed on my dissapproval and repent to me in verse. Your demons seem to know their pain as you penned such an amazing piece of poetry describing them and what they try to do spilling out across the page into your day to day events. Loved this, keep em' coming

[L]

don't we all? I think you capture the essence of the demons here

[WatashLegend]

Secret demons that lurk inside us all, you have freed the captive in this write and also sending a message to those demons that in time they can and will be defeated. Nice write

[Blue Moon Ice Cream]

I like how each stanza is slightly similar and yet there are differences to keep it interesting. I could almost hear the demons whispering and writhing as I read this!
:) Okay, and here is the but...There are a couple of places where you use "everytime," and it should be two separate words. In the last line, just a typo, "release" should be "released."

[Maya Storm]

I can definitely relate, to the demons, not the secret... I have set all my demons free lol... I was not as strong as you, I should have kept them in.

I like the flow on the piece, like a dance one line passes you on to the other. Good write

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

I know about these secret demons, mean little boogers they are. Well written!

[ju]

beautiful flow, and love the last line.