She comes out

Nobody cares about me, about how

in the middle of the

I feel, what I think.

night, when

  Nobody wants to know about my

I am most

stupid problems. Nobody would really care if

alone,

I killed myself. I have

saying horrible things. She

nobody. Nobody cares. There

is my

isn't anybody to stop me from taking

imaginary friend. The voice

a knife and cutting

inside my head. My

every inch of my body. I am

demon. She is

alone.

Silenda.

Reviews

[Ron Jeremy]

According to Merriam Webster, constructive is: promoting improvement or development. The comment promoted development certainly and improvement by suggesting possible areas to improve (hence improvement). This site exists to help you fix your writing and make you a better writer, it is what we as writers do. Discuss each other's works and workshop. It's still constructive even if you as a stubborn author does not want to change anything. If you approach a situation with the idea that you already know everything or do not need to improve or change anything, you will learn nothing and your time is wasted on this site. It would be better to simply make a word press or other such page with no forum for discussion. Praise does not make you better.

[Prayers and Proclamatio..]

Your comment did not promote improvement. What you said to do would not have improved this poem. It would have made it less real, it would have made it mean less. You reviewed my poem. You finished reviewing it and posted your review. Then you posted another comment. I didn't actually say anything. My opinion does matter, seeing as I am the one who decides what gets changed. I did not dismiss your comment. I simply took it in a way that you didn't want me to take it. I did not come on this website to learn. I came on this website to post my writing, and maybe see what people think about it. I know what you think about it, now kindly leave me alone.

[Ron Jeremy]

Seems like more people disagree with you, including the dictionary. Classical workshopping has you remain completely silent while you receive other peoples' ideas about the work in question. Only after it has been thoroughly discussed and reviewed do you even get to speak once about it, and that is only to address possible confusions about meaning or to provide insight that they can use to further workshop it. Your opinion, however precious, does not matter for the most part. When you submit your work to the eyes of other people, you lose the ability to dismiss a comment merely because you think it will make something worse. That is the sign of one who does not wish to learn.

[Prayers and Proclamatio..]

I never said I wanted to get better, and I certainly do not need your help. If I were to do as your comment suggested, my writing would, in my opinion, be worse. It's my opinion that matters when it comes to my writing. And, if I were to do so, it wouldn't be my writing anymore. This is my account. My profile. My writing. Not yours, not anyone else's. I am open to any comments about my writing. That's what this site is for. That's why I post my work. If I find a comment constructive, I will mark it as such. If I don't find a comment constructive, then I will do the same. The option is there for a reason.

[Prayers and Proclamatio..]

I did not dislike your review. I didn't find it constructive, so I marked it as such. You see, I didn't write any of the things I put on this site so that you think they're good. And it doesn't help me at all if you tell me what to fix about my writing and how to make it better. So I would appreciate it if you would stop.

[Ron Jeremy]

Don't dislike a review just because it doesn't fawn over your work. This is a site for review and workshopping, not unabated praise for unfinished or unsatisfactory pieces.

[Ron Jeremy]

This is great, but the self expression here verges on cliché teenage angst, I would try to make it seem less "hey look at me, I'm another depressed teenager who thinks its so original to write poetry about it, pay attention to me, please?"