The Champ

Trying to make a comeback on here.

  I fell in love with the King of the town 

He showed me around 

Told me his secrets 

Gave me the key to his city 

And left his mark on me

He gave me hope that one day

Will be our everyday 

But all he ever did was lock me up 

In his castle - hidden from his people 

While he enjoyed the company of his merry men and fair ladies

Drinking and dinning for hours every night 

Leaving me guessing 

Thinking that I could be royal by his side 

Believing that I was his precious little diamond

Just all his and everything I did was for him

Now I am exiled from his chambers 

Thrown in the dungeon 

I knew this day would come 

The day all his smiles became false 

And the Joker was me

I created this chaos 

Falling for a fool - made me one too

"Happily ever after" 

Is the greatest myth in history 

Told by many, but lived by the lucky ones

So I know I will prevail 

The warrior in me will fight 

Fight for the champion of her heart 

He’s no King 

But he exists in this world

He will be the knight 

And I will shine again

Brighter than he ever let me 

Because a real diamond deserves to shine

And not to be hidden in the dark.

Reviews

[Neon]

Ah! I hate it, pretty...I hate seeing someone as beautiful as you feel such kinda pain this world gives!
Well ...I hardly read large/lengthy poems but I don't know why, I just visited the page and read your profile ..first off, your profile really makes an impact on me, I love your profile page where you write very thoughtful words about who you are, who the people are and so on ... nice!

And this's what that forced me to read some of your stuffs too so, I browsed "The Champ" and I was just gonna leave the page because of it's length but.. I don't know, why I stopped and read ...and as I started to read your this great poem ..believe me my heart's still seemed curious to read this poem once more...this poem's very beautifully penned and I love it's length .... n I think, this poem needed to be lengthy ....you've proved it that whether the poem's short or long ..the poem's always a poem and if you read, feel the depth of the poem then the lengthy one is often seemed short....

Keep writing, this poem's very deep, as I've already mentioned that I hate seeing someone as beautiful as you feel sad so .. yeah, you've well penned that your really a "Joker" yes, Your a "Joker"..
If you make someone's life beautifully living with your scents and in return what you got... nothing but what you've never deserved.." A Pain!"then yeah, your a "Joker!"
If you make your someone protective and keep him always happy in this world, save him from evils, pray for him days and nights and so on and in return what you got ... you again got nothing but what you've never deserved "A Pain!" then again yeah! your a Joker!
....
"A pain that rips your heart, a heart that passes through much hurt, a hurt that spoils your life and a life where the days n nights're on the line!"

So, yeah, your a fool, your a joker because if you loved a man and man given you pain in return/in reply that's what that makes this world "INSANE!" But now ......
and I hate such kinda bad kings who make their queens sad and put them into the world of pain ...

It's a time to get outta the world of "Jokers!" Fools! because now no more! no more pain! no more hurt! no more regret! let's end this what happened to you! because your a diamond and diamond always shine and spread their white shining light around the world whether a diamond's in the light or it's stuck off in the darkness ...

Well ... nice poem, this poem really touched my heart! Ah! Poor guy! I think, he was a poor king who couldn't see the beauty of your heart, the shining in your eyes, If I were that "King!" I wouldn't have done what he has done with you because your an angel ...an angel of the heart ..when you walk, the sand becomes gold, an ocean damn cold, when you smile, the sun comes up as a sunlight ..but when you do cry ..sun replaces with the moon ..a moon that's unleash to your smile ..

So, pretty! Keep smiling!
Your a real fighter ... let's make the life beautiful with all your scent because this world's became very bad, dear one, let's this world go into the depth of your heart cause, the life's already beneath on your barefoots so .. let that poor and stupid king go into the ashes because your a life oneslf and to make ya happy and safe's what "Prince" priorities ...

(I hope this "Prince" is much better than that stupid king who missed the chance to fly with you into the heaven!) Ha!

And hey ... No! Your not a "Joker!" not even a "Fool!" but a flower ... who's beauty's as same as a red rose and red rose's always red that makes the beat fast into the heart so, not to worry about kings ... as long as "Prince" as same as me are on this world .. you the beautiful angels're safe and happy into their arms because "King" kept you into the arms of "Sword!" but "Prince" always keeps the angels into the arms of flowers ... into the depth of heart without any hurt because "Your not born, not made to consume pain but to someone's rain that washes away the pain!"


Keep smiling, pretty!
Now hey ..c'mmon, don't be sad! You ain't look beautiful with sadness... Forget the past, let's re-start the life n make the life delight with all of your scented smile so that people could pluck the flowers from the sky for you just to be in your life!

Keep shining as same as a "Diamond!" :)

[LoveAlwaysJB]

Now this is the reason I write! The only thing in the world that truly has ever mattered to me is words. Words are powerful as we make them, and yours have deeply been felt - electrifying. Honestly, I am quite speechless, and I thank you for that. I know my writing isn't perfect, but I like to think it's different in the sense I write to change or impact others with what I do write. I am very glad to hear that I have done that with you. It's a nice feeling knowing my writing can deeply touch others. That is why I choose to keep writing for people like you.



The fact you did give this poem a chance even though it was lengthy proves to me my words do matter. I have this way of writing long and lengthy writes because I like to tell snippets of bigger stories. I have always had a problem with shorting down my ideas rather I focus on getting the point across in my own way. My mother once told me when you take time for your art, and give it everything you believe it deserves then you're giving your soul time to become grown.

"A pain that rips your heart, a heart that passes through much hurt, a hurt that spoils your life and a life where the days n nights're on the line!" I couldn't agree more with this, but nights have become rather soothing because I am in the company of growth. Even though I may be hurt I know every day is blessing. In other words every 24 matters so give me another 24, and I will make the changes needed to become better.



The Joker part of this Poem was actually inspired by the Vintage Hollywood Film "The Man Who Laughs" and The Joker from Batman's obsession of Chaos Vs Order. In a way, I knew this King enjoyed chaos while all I wanted to do was bring him order, but in the end chaos had won. Yet, Order is still winning with me because that is what I prefer. Order is the only thing I will settle for.


Yet again, I thank you for giving my writing a chance because that is like taking a chance on me. I highly appreciate this! Yes, smiling is the plan.

I suppose you're right who needs a King when a Prince has more heart. After all, Kings truly love their power while a Prince is in love with the possibilities that life has to offer.

P.S I have a feeling you will like my other poems that are yet to come, they have to deal with hope in love and in life as a whole.

Take Care

- Jassi Genevieve

[Neon]

The pleasure's always mine, you beautiful one! Thanks for replying my lengthy review, I hope, My review didn't make you bother. lol

Well .. here I wrote this line ...

"A pain that rips your heart, a heart that passes through much hurt, a hurt that spoils your life and a life where the days n nights're on the line!"
So, I don't think, you got the actual meaning of my "Enigmatic" line ... it's meaning is this :-

"When we do love, love brings happiness in the life and if it brings the happiness, joy, love n peace in the life ..at the same time, it also brings some pain because love's what that makes the life beautiful and painful to live with happiness and pain because if you do know how to smile then you must learn how to cry, the tears come because all these things that love brings in the life keep the livings/all the living balanced and keep their foots on the ground.. (Because every living has got one heart, a heart that feels and is just thirsty only a drop of love) and those who learn how to live with happiness and pain, they learn what's a meaning of life and they know "every problem is a new opportunity in the life!" ...
And when the pain comes in the life with love ..it does rip the heart off because our heart's an addicted to love .."A LOVE THAT ONLY BRINGS HAPPINESS AND PEACE but NOT PAIN!" So, when pain comes get enters into the depth of the heart, our heart feels the pain we consume that's given by love because "We only want consuming happiness, peace and joy!" and that's what spoils those people's lives who don't have "POTENTIAL" to learn such kinda things. (That's why I considered your this beautiful well penned marvelous poem a "THOUGHT_PROVOKING" too in the sense of love!)

And after spoiling the lives ... some people's (not all) life's stop at the point where ""THE DAYS N NIGHTS'RE EQUAL/SAME" and the heart breathes and beats "ON THE TRACK OF ONLY ONE LINE!" A LINE OF SADNESS! where there's no end of that line alias no end of sadness! but those who've potential learning every second something new from everywhere from everything whether "it's a love or a pain, the name in the rain, the rain with insane that spoils the life's fame!" ..they never let the life go into the ashes of sadness and never let their hearts go beating on the one line track! (as same as beautiful "Jassi Genevieve" doing because she's got much hurt by someone but she doesn't wanna let her life go into the ashes because she learnt that "she's a diamond and she's a fighter and of course, she has to live, live and jut live making the life, the world, the hearts on the earth beautiful with all of her intoxicated scent...so, now "Jassi" opens up her wings and flies over the sky just to let every fella of the world know ... how beautiful is she and her scented bashful smile that makes the heartbeat fast every-time!")

In the nutshell, "The meaning of love is not hurt every-time but the meaning of love's life because life's for love and love's for us!"

I hope, all the things cleared up about the line! :)

Thanks for your beautiful reply with the great description about the them of your write!
Yes, of course, my dearest beautiful one, How can I break your heart?? Yes, of course, I'll read your more stuffs and let you know what I get from there.

Ha! You prettiest angel! You just make me smile!
Thanks, yeah, "Prince" has got more heart than that stupid king!" Ha!

O' by the way, "Prince" is always unleash to you, pretty!" He just loves to see you happy every-time because as I always say, i'd say it again that "You ain't made to consume pain, bring some tears at all but living into the depth of a heart far from the pain into the arms of flowers where your smiles start-off the day with an every individual ray that brights the day with the beauty of yours you gain!"

[BlackHeart]

I find this poem very interesting, I loved how in the end you said that they would shine brighter than he ever let them.

[LoveAlwaysJB]

I am glad you loved the ending, and yes shinning brighter than ever how it should be right?

And welcome to writer's cafe :)