New Experience of the Eclipse

As the sun eclipsed the moon,
Through the midnight sky,
Eyes toward it
The wind blowing,
The eclipse,
Its rare
Its beautiful.
Everyone appreciated the beauty
and i appreciated the......
Everything.
It was the first time i have experienced it,
saw it..
This eclipse
made me so entertained
I couldn't keep my eyes off it when it was happening.
    The eclipse completes its time
         and soon it became
               to its normal
            bright sky,
             and i lose my interest.
                           

Reviews

[Liz-z]

Beautiful, quite amazing, I love it! :D
Favorite lines:
"It's rare,
It's beautiful,"
Certainly is beautiful I say! ^.^
"I coudln't keep my eyes off it when it was happening
...
And soon it became
To it's normal
Bright sky
And I lose my interest,"
Fantastic ending, really is! :D

[nono]

Very cool how you did that. The poem is beautiful all and all. LOVED IT NICE JOB!

[Nina Kari]

I loved this! Perfect ending, and brilliant write! :D

[Randolf Ramos]

Gret wisdom here, perhaps life is a type of eclipse that we are about to experience or being experience. We have to enjoy the present part of our life that as the eclipse goes over, past will never come and return again, that is the essence of life perhaps! keep on writing.

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"The eclipse completes its time
and soon it became
to its normal
bright sky,
and i lose my interest."

...you articulate this so we with magnificent expression-
...and i really love the mood shift...a very smoothly written poem...I Love This!!!

james:-)

[KatiePie]

God I loved this, the whole thing flows so perfectly and the ending was like cold water on my face, a beautiful write.

[Bard Constantine]

What's interesting about this poem is that it can be taken literally, as a view of the eclipse or... (pardon me if I over think), it can also be looked at as the way some treat relationships... when it's brand new it's beautiful, unique, mesmerizing... but once the novelty wears off it becomes mundane, troublesome, boring. And the interest is... lost.

Great writing.