'She was me'

A short poem based on my experiences with depression..

'she was me'

"..She bare's the resemblance of the soul i once tried to save.

I'd go without light for days hoping that one day she'd see that through my eyes she could be saved.

Maybe i was wrong to think i was right, maybe you was wrong to think you had to be unhappy.

But either way a girl like you would never be happy, but i'd try and try giving way to hope for a brand new day.

But i woke up and realised that the girl i was trying to save was me.

I'm still me, very much unhappy.

Author's Note

I'd love feedback :)

Reviews

[Chris]

For me it was always the little things... I stopped reaching early on for anything big -
either I didn't get them, couldn't keep them, had them taken away, OR watched as another purposely broke it to bits even shaking fingers couldn't dream-fix. You can treasure lil pieces of soul you can hide in a pocket... lil bits of fluff no one else would think of any value and hence leave to your caring.

Always remember to SILENTLY speak with an imaginary friend... you'll get fewer stares and less teasing.

I don't know that I was ever "saved" BUT my Nightmares are MINE and I hold them tight and close.

You spoke well and I understood...

Take care,
Chris

[realmwriter]

All the i's need to be I's and the word "was" here "maybe you was wrong to think you had to be unhappy." should be were. It's a sad piece and I like as I am often melancholy myself and write a lot of sad poems. Well done.

[sivan]

well written... think we've all experienced it sometime in our lives

[rwar ish me]

ver nice and well written. Wonderful write

[Sleepless]

depression something that i once experienced its horrible i like the poem dont be unhappy life is short and it pasasses to fast enjoy the moments that are there like when yo wake up if i am not helping then im not a good helper in this problem but wish you the very best :)

[paradise]

Wow this is a fantastic poem I love it so much emotion and pain i relate very well Greeat write I loved it

[Martin Lochner]

Lovely and the honesty is great.great urgency and original!!!!!!

[...]

I know exactly these feelings here. Such powerful emotions displayed so well.

[stars are far]

So nice
i loved this a lot i think it is the first thing i read written by you ..
but great piece hope to read more of your work :D

[Dove]

Even though I have not been in that position yet I can still say that this is a wonderful poem and you did a great job on it.

[Jeremy Baker]

I wish I didn't know all too well what you're saying here.