You are the Fan

You are the fan

I wait in your winds

to feel your flow

run through my clothes,

my feet lift

to dance upon your drifts 

twirling, swaying

colours swirling 

hair blowing

tempted 

to leave my neck.

Hands scooping

the essence of you

blowing in your breeze

catching 

currents,

sliding swiftly down

into the heart 

of your gale. 

Reviews

[emmajoy]

What a gust of wonderful thoughts and sights and words flung in the air to be relived and written of.....

Forgive those seemingly rushed words, minus punctuation, please. BUT -. your poem seems to speed along as if the fan is moving ultra fast!. There's a near flamboyant, almost avaricious enjoyment of that fan; was and is an invitation to memorable pleasures! Mid-twenties niece here, reading over my shoulder, thinks your words are magic! Me too.

[Laura Kate]

I was so happy to read your lovely and lifting review Emma, thank you so much, and a heartfelt thanks to your niece too - I really appreciate it!
Very best wishes,
Laura

[Chris Shaw]

I imagine here a scorching hot day with no air conditioning, just an electric fan, to try and move the air around to allow the temperature to be kinder. It is light, airy and so very welcome. Makes a great metaphor too LauraKate.

Chris

[Laura Kate]

Thank you so much Chris, I'm so pleased to hear it :)
Laura

[Einstein Noodle]

love your fan ma'am ... its a powerful one for sure to lift you so in heart and spirit ;) makes me think of all things youthful, in spring time newness ... the whirlwind of Love .. how it takes us .. your poem has truly inspired an awakening ... my neck and jaw are beginning to blush ;) but i am an old man....more of a blow hard than a gale ;)))))))))))))))))))))))))) love you poem Laura .. uplifting and inspiring .. creates the scene and offers characters to hang details on ... has movement and music in the wind .. with start, middle and closing .. well done .. fine free verse says i! :)
E.

[Laura Kate]

Thank you so much E I am SO happy to read this! It's a different approach for me so your encouraging and positive review means a lot. I'm also pretty impressed with myself for the blushing I must say ;)
Thank you!
Laura

[Kent Rawski]

Ah but you are the fun reminds me of the song miracles by jefferson starship my favorite song especially the grace slick version

[Laura Kate]

Ooh I like Jefferson Starship but haven't heard miracles before, will be dancing to it this afternoon for sure! Thank you for reading Kent :)

[Kent Rawski]

youre welcome good stuff

[jacob erin-cilberto]

love the metaphor here.....fans give us breeze...and relationships can feel like a breeze for awhile....but then comes the air conditioning...and one might freeze out the other.
j.

[Laura Kate]

Thank you Jacob, yes that is true, I've never been much of a fan of air conditioning...
Laura.