Sleep Talking

I whisper to the night 

my daydreams of you, 

hoping that they might 

eventually come true.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I love your simply-stated midnight whisper, all -- but NOT the word "dreams" -- it seems in a poem this sparse, there might be a more potent & palpable word to use here. Something more startling than the tired overused idea of "dreams." Many would stick with a straightforward wish like this & I wouldn't be disappointed if you do . . . I just like to play with a wide variety of words! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Laura Kate]

Thank you Margie! I completely get what you're saying. Would you feel any differently if I changed the title to 'Sleeptalking' ? x

[barleygirl]

I love the first line & especially love the word "whispers" so I'll leave it at that . . .

[Laura Kate]

Gotcha ... thank you

[Coyote Poetry]

Dreams and wishes, make the ending more sweeter. Thank you Laurakate for sharing the amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote

[Laura Kate]

Thank you Coyote, so happy that you stopped for a visit!
Laura

[Coyote Poetry]

Always my pleasure and you are welcome Laura.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

if poetry can convince...this verse just might do the trick.
j.

[Laura Kate]

Thank you Jacob :)) Laura