Nothing Rhymes With Orange

from my old account.

We are all oranges

and everyone knows

Nothing rhymes with orange

Will I ever rhyme

with life, or am I

Destined

To only rhyme with

Dead

I am strapped down

and force fed.

I am an orange

and everyone knows

nothing rhymes with orange

I want to rhyme with

Love

but I only seem to attract

Hate

Should i inject the needle?

and just sedate?

myslef?

I want to rhyme with apple

with peaches

with rainbow grapes

But i only rhyme with orange

So i am nothing.

Because evryone knows

Nothing rhymes with orange.

Reviews

[C. Porter]

Nice one!
A few things I'd do differently, though. This part:
To only rhyme with
Dead
I am strapped down
and force fed.
For some reason the rhyme with 'dead' and 'fed' seems forced. It doesn't really fir, in my opinion.
Also, in the lines
Should i inject the needle?
and just sedate?
myslef?
You put a question mark at the end of each line, though it doean't really belong in any of those places. It cuts off bthe sentence pretty much randomly, then picks it back up again. Reading it, I paused between each question mark, which interrepted the flow.
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Now for the good stuff!
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Lots of feeling into a semi-short poem, relating a funny thing to something more serious in a very clever, light-hearted way. I loved how you said:
I want to rhyme with apple
with peaches
with rainbow grapes
But i only rhyme with orange
So i am nothing.
Because evryone knows
Nothing rhymes with orange.
Very intriguing. Puts a new spin on the old, annoying fact of life: absolutely NOTHING rhymes with orange.

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

I like this...lots of feeling in it...
Great Job

[PaperHearts]

Wow! I loved this. I loved the concept of this, and the feeling of struggle and questioning that was portrayed in this piece. The repetition of 'and everyone knows nothing rhymes with orange' was very effective, and helped to highlight the emotion.
A very well-written, heartfelt poem,
~PaperHearts

[Nae Nae]

This has a lot of feeling put into it ... I really love this