Stillness

The quietness of the night of being awake

Sititing, laying, lacking the sleep.

The warm confort of relaxation.

Staring at that darkness.

Listening for the sounds of the night.

Any single sound spoking you.

Your heart races, your breaking quckens.

Your senses finally taking over.

Certain nights you hear nothing except

The beating of your heart

You short quick breathes.

Worried if this could be right.

So very used to the sounds that surround you.

Reviews

[Augustus]

A wonderful depiction of a sleepless night... "Listening for the sounds of the night" vividly describes that unnamed fear and insecurity...

"Certain nights you hear nothing except
The beating of your heart"
again, very simple and very tender....

However, the end I feel was truly wonderful
"Worried if this could be right
So very used to the sounds that surround you"
Wow! Sometimes, even the sounds you dread feel comforting, when you don't hear them at all... The silence is infinitely more chilling!
Lovely write!
keep penning! :)

[J.Black]

You sure you're only 14? You write really maturely! I know how you feel- insomnia. When your min is racing, a zillion thoughts and you just can't find it in you to sleep. Although your eyes are heavy, those thoughts, that silence, little noises...

It's almost errie and creepy. Keep writing! This is great.

[RDOriginal]

I'm sure this will strike a chord with anybody who's found themself lying awake like this. When the very stillness of the night is somehow disturbing. You might benefit from reading your work aloud before posting it as some mistakes sneak in otherwise (e.g. spoking instead of spooking and breathes instead of breaths). Imagine you've never read it before and read out loud, I do that and find it's very uselful to catch missing/wrong words or punctuation that's not so great. Other than that you've chosen a good theme and executed it well. Keep up the good work!