Tearful

Just playing with words!

The turbulence of my heart,
Has flowed through my eyes.
I am crying..

Author's Note

Is it a good haiku?

Reviews

[Jack...]

Penny, I think this little piece is great. The feelings it expresses shine through loud and clear.

To answer you question though, this is not what you could consider a Haiku poem. Haiku, is always about nature...it is closer to a Senryu, which are written based on human feelings, experiences, thoughts and emotions. But, that being said Haiku or Senryu hold strict guidelines of 17 total sylables. The count per line is arguable, but 17 is it and your fine poem is only 16 syllables (if I counted correctly).

But, it is a beautiful piece of work and I thoroughly enjoyed reading it.

[Penny]

Oh. Thnx a lot jack. & ur review surely enhanced my knowledge. Well if nt a haiku, a senryu is wat i may cal it. Wat my first priority is dat it is well liked and dat i did acheive dis for my first attempts.

[Sami Khalil]

"The turbulence of my heart,
Has flowed through my eyes.
I am crying.."

[Penny]

Feels great wheh your work is not only admired but remembered. Thank you.

[Sami Khalil]

So true. You are welcome. Any time...:).......

[Sami Khalil]

In my library...:).....................

[Penny]

Its truly an honour for me. Thanks a lot.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome muchly..:)

[Himanshu shekhar]

Aatayant sundar kabita hai.penny jee.Aatayant aakarsak.!

[Penny]

Shukriya. Waese aakarshak aur adbhut toh aapka yeh review bhi hai, sabse alag, shaayad isi ko kehte hain matrabhasha se pyar karna. Ek baar punah dhanyavad aapka.

[Himanshu shekhar]

Aapka bahut bahu aabhar.

[Laminators Dubai]

playing with words....with amusement. thoughtful enough for me^^

[Penny]

Thnx a lot. I'm glad to hear that you liked it.

[Sami Khalil]

One word : Awesome...:).....................

[Penny]

Tenkew. I'm on cloud 9

[Sami Khalil]

Good. I hope you stay happy...:)......................

[Penny]

Aww. I'll try.

[Sami Khalil]

:).......................

[Vidya Bacchus]

It is most excellent penny .Well done:)

[Penny]

Thnx a lot vidya. U hv motivated me yet again..

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome dear friend:)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

Its amazing! Short......simple......beautiful!!! Beautiful description of emotion!!!

[Penny]

Tenkew very much. I hope this beautiful description of d horrible sad emotuon makes me a true writer.

[Pushkar Prabhat]

It sure does! You are an amazing writer!

[Penny]

Thnx again pushkar.

[Pushkar Prabhat]

You are most welcome!

[Kevin]

"The turbulence of my heart,
Has flowed through my eyes" I really love that part.

[Penny]

Tenkew kevin. I hope i hope my purpose of using these words is solved.