Torn.

Wrote this after a break-up. I think the words can describe it better than I can.

Falling,

Falling,

F a l l i n g.

I lost my grip

On everything real.

Emotions blur,

Bleeding together in a

Masterpiece of me.

The strings of my heart

Pull me routinely to you.

When my mind catches up,

I fall away from myself.

My heart knows

What it cannot have,

And the longing fogs my mind

From reality.

I am lost,

Torn by the desire and the truth.

Nothing I could have done

Would have ever been good enough.

Your expectations

Set far too high.

My expectations

Set far too low.

 

 

 

Reviews

[cfix]

Wow this one is really amazing...
I really enjoyed this one,
Very well expressed emotions in this.
Love the last three lines.

[Lucy Green]

This is really good.

[Adelia Alighieri]

Such great flow of words and the perfect presentation. Well done!

[fallen.angel.]

This poem is magnificent~!!
The meaning is so powerful and it describes the unrequited love perfectly =]

[Aisha]

I like the last four lines, with the expectations. I've never been through a breakup, but this does seem pretty accurate. I also like how you repeated falling, and spaced it out. The repetition really adds to the poem.