Pain

Pain:

A strange friend and a confusing enemy.

It can be the thing you crave or what you despise more than anything.

Pain can be what you wish upon someone else or yourself.

It can be the last thing you feel

as your life slips

from your dying body

or the thing that saves you.

Author's Note

It's a bit of a work in progress; no rhyme in this one. Should I publish more? Please don't be too unkind.

Reviews

[Dhaye]

My dear, there's nothing to worry about having no rhyme in a piece. That's free verse. My only suggestion is you can improve it's structure by cutting some lines just like this one (the last line was made into last 4 lines):

"It can be the last thing you feel
as your life slips
from your dying body
or the thing that saves you."

Anyway, you are still the painter. You paint the color you want to your artwork...
Just keep on publishing your works. In an optimistic way, this site has helped me improved my works when I started here.

[Desiree O'Neal]

Yes you should publish more, I like it and its vary true .

[SilentScreamingTears]

Thank you for the encouragement. Dhaye's suggestion is owed a great deal of credit as it gave a lot to the piece.