Displacement is a Modern Condition

Displacement is a Modern Condition

A Poem by Lorriman
"

...in the dying moonlight, an out of tune piano plays its last note ...

"
Beneath the cities phantoms 
lie the beating heart of good people; 
reaching outwards from shadow.

In the dying moonlight
an out of tune piano plays its last note;
warped by water over time.

In the close darkness
faces fade emitting anguish;
I wish I could find the missing piece.

That one remaining jigsaw
the puzzle would be complete;
and in it, 
I would be whole.

One last time.

© 2014 Lorriman


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Lorriman
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This has a lost and found theme in the lines...
the way you give us the plot lines in each stanza...
and what they represent...
and then find that all are interconnected somehow...
and what is the last missing void ---
piece to the whole picture...to make it complete...

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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"the puzzle would be complete;
and in it,
I would be whole."

A splendid poem sir...Thank you for sharing...:)............



Posted 10 Years Ago


In the dying moonlight
an out of tune piano plays its last note- I'm sure you know it but this is the most genius line in the poem, I even feel like I've read it before, haha.
One thing is that maybe in the second stanza use less words so it could flow better.



Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lorriman

10 Years Ago

Thanks for reading Frontier, and your comments. I live on an island, albeit a big one, so water is a.. read more
I do like the line "In the dying moonlight, an out of tune piano plays its last note." It sounds like a wonderful beginning piece to a story xD Anyway I liked it, everyone want's to find that one last piece of the puzzle to help them feel whole.

Good Job

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This has a lost and found theme in the lines...
the way you give us the plot lines in each stanza...
and what they represent...
and then find that all are interconnected somehow...
and what is the last missing void ---
piece to the whole picture...to make it complete...

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Lorriman
Lorriman

Glasgow, Scotland, United Kingdom



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