$$ Pennies from Heaven $$

“A little ditty…about coin.”

Today an astonishing turn of events!

The appearance of currency,

Dollars and cents!

 

That arrived as a gift

In block paper form,

To answer a prayer

and resolve debtor storm.

 

Oh Copper, Oh Silver,

Oh precious windfall!

The skies have seemingly,

answered my call!

 

 

Beneficent Universe,

Graced me with gold!

Financial composure, restored!

Cash to hold!

 

And now my purse strings

Utter grateful retort

Having been spared

From creditor’s court.

 

Oh thank you

Miraculous spirit of giving

For shining abundance

On my place of living.

 

It really is a groovy and serendipitous universe, if you just believe ;}.

Author's Note

Against all credible evidence to the contrary, sometimes you just have to believe in a well-intentioned, benevolent and abundant power. And be grateful (before and after).

Reviews

[Cole Hayley]

And now my purse strings
Utter grateful retort
Having been spared
From creditor’s court.

Oh thank you
Miraculous spirit of giving
For shining abundance
On my place of living.



My bank account is severely in the negative so this just rings with optimism, hopefully some of that will rub off on me. What I've highlighted above I think is very clever, the whole poem is clever, thats your strong suit, but I think those lines are what really nailed it for me. Great work.

[Lorraine Montez]

Dear Cole, I've been away from the site for a few days and missing good happenings here! Thank you for your personal review! I do hope some good luck rubs off for you. And I appreciate your kind words about the piece. Thank you for taking the time to share! Best regards, Lorraine

[reluctantsyren]

I have felt this! I was given a jar of change once as a gift! I used to dig through couches for it! Love everything but could do with the last line "It...to winky" although I fully agree with the sentiment! Want to hug u! cheers!

[Lorraine Montez]

Hey Syren! Just found your review. Thank you! I wondered about that last line, myself. I was swept away by that precise sentiment at the time of writing, so I decided to leave it in. Also, wasn't sure if the last line before it was a strong enough note to end on. I suppose, included in the art of good writing...is knowing when to stop writing, lol. I love your idea about giving a change jar as a gift. How thoughtful! Hugs back! And thanks again. -Lorraine

[reluctantsyren]

I agree! In writing they say to kill your darlings...but that is so hard!

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Amazing poem! Fun to read and has a wonderful moral, you rock!

Ps, to reply to a comment click on the 3rd from the bottom right. In that way the other person would be notified. I say this because of the comment below. Have a great day :)

[Lorraine Montez]

Dear Cyprian, Great name, by the way! Thanks so much for your review. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. Kind of you to take the time to comment. And thanks too, for that review tip. I realized after I read it, that I'd responded to Hailey's comment in the wrong place. I've corrected that now. Thanks! Best regards, Lorraine

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Hi Lorraine, thank you for the compliment! You're most welcome for the review. You're a talented writer! Keep up the great work! Oh, no problem, glad to help... i did the same thing! lol

[Hailey Juliet]

What a charming piece! I really enjoyed the opening lines:

Today an astonishing turn of events!
The appearance of currency,
Dollars and cents!

Quick and to the point; lighthearted and fun to read. It was the perfect intro to this poem, not contrived and not overly bogged down in description, but clear and precise enough to open it up and engage the audience in the theme. Introduction of a turn of events and the need for money answered. Really a good opener!

In this next bit, I love the play of the words storm and windfall, it evokes imagery of weather and the elements as parallels to your theme:

and resolve debtor storm.

Oh Copper, Oh Silver,
Oh precious windfall!
The skies have seemingly,
answered my call!

I also really enjoyed the personification of purse strings:

And now my purse strings
Utter grateful retort
. . .

it is lines like this that add charm to a piece and make it fun to read and imagine in semi-realistic terms.
Overall, I thought your use of words was wonderful as you described serendipitous money in different ways as providence from the heavens. I like the way you expressed the joy and relief of coming into unexpected money, perhaps literally or as a metaphor for blessings of all types. On the surface, this poem is an enjoyable read with terrific word play that gives it charm and light humor, but on a deeper level you say something more sincere and comment upon the notion of blessings and gifts bestowed by some sort of higher power. This was a unique and well thought out way of going about this topic. Thank you for sharing, Lorraine, it was a pleasure to read!
Hailey JJ

[Lorraine Montez]

Dear Hailey, What a delight it was for me to discover your gracious review here! I am filled with gratitude for your generous and comprehensive coverage of the piece. I so appreciate the length of time you have spent considerately exploring the structure and various themes of the poem. Thank you for giving it such an attentive read. Your feedback is gratefully received, and helpful to me in learning how material is perceived by other writers, whose work I respect. I am very glad we have met on the site, and I look forward to reading more of your exceptional material. Thank you. Fondly, Lorraine